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Corrected Section 2 Essays (Writing Tasks A and B)

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Sample Essays: Task A & Task B

It is often commented that there are differences between themes in Task A and Task B. Yes, it is true that Task A usually revolves around geopolitical issues (war, democracy, crime) and Task B surrounding personal and social topics (friendship, trust, love). Yet, having a broad philosophical idea can be  applicable to both.

In fact, one can write on the  same idea  (as I did) on  both  tasks using the   same structure .  One set of examiners mark Task A, and another, Task B, so you  won’t be penalised  for repeating the same concepts between essays. By focusing only on one writing style, this allows you to be more consistent during your preparation and more confident during the exam. See why  philosophy  writing can be so  effective . Sample the below tasks from a student who scored 80+ in the September GAMSAT Section II.

TASK A SAMPLE

• “We live in a society exquisitely dependent on science and technology, in which hardly anyone knows anything about science and technology.”
• “True love is a lack of desire to check one’s smartphone in another’s presence.”
• “We’re a generation of idiots, smart phones and dumb people.”
• “Men have become the tools of their tools.” –
• “Technological progress has merely provided us with more efficient means for going backwards.”

“It is better to be hated for who you are, than to be loved for who you are not.” The Famous French author- Andre Gide’s words satirically echo our society’s trend toward supressing individual identity through technology. Modern smartphones have transformed the process in which we interconnect with family and friends, the transparent nature of this communication has encouraged uniformity in the way we express ourselves. To live in such a state that is bereft of true passion, is sin to ourselves and a disservice to our precious earthly time. In alleviating this type of irrational thinking, introspection into our virtues can provide clarity in finding meaningful purpose within ourselves.

Technology provides an effortless avenue to glamorise an insincere lifestyle. Our insatiable addiction to materialistic goods and exotic experiences is readily reflected in our technological practices. The masse following of internet celebrities and influencers sets an example for all to follow, encouraging us to pursue a life of glamour and glitz, free from the ‘distractions’ of meaningful relationships and passions. However, beyond the show-reel manufactured through clever editing, is a shallow lifestyle that is ultimately unfulfilling. Technology has fabricated a false livelihood embedded upon shallow actions, the euphoria gained from chasing external validation is done in vain. The aspirations to vicariously live out the lives of others, is perhaps the most certain path to become dissatisfied with our own existence.

The resolution to this issue, stems from a life of intrinsic personal fulfilment. The understanding and implementation of a virtuous life can help us love our true passions and purpose. Chinese philosopher-Confucius, purported that traditional virtues such as ‘courage’ and ‘sincerity’, can go a long way in helping us escape the shackles of outdated social expectations. Here, a virtuous individual should enact courage to denounce time and effort spent in pursuit of vanity and the validation of others. It takes one to practice a virtuous lifestyle to pursue a life in loving passions that are meaningful to them, a result that could never be achieved through the dissimilar pursuit of external validation.

Finally, the necessity to avoid the distractions of technology is hastened by our own temporal existence. One might take motivation from our undeniable limitations on time, since we can never be truly sure our length of existence remaining. How wasteful it must be to exhaust our precious efforts on desires that we don’t truly love, for the superficial gratification gained from others. Those who partake in the mindless technological manipulation, ought to realise the epiphany in allocating efforts towards loving their true ideals, it is in their best interests to reach this realisation in earnest.

The authority of technology paradoxically guides us towards a life that is devoid of love or purpose. The white noise of social media presents a façade of experiences that yield no long-term pleasure or fulfilment. It is only through introspection into our true virtues, that we can find passions that allow life to be memorable and meaningful. Breaking into this virtuous life may seem daunting at first, but we are rewarded with knowledge that our finite time is spent on loving a truly noble cause- ourselves.

TASK B SAMPLE

• “Human beings need a challenge and space exploration is the biggest adventure of all.”
• “The greatest gain from space travel consists in the extension of our knowledge. IN a hundred years this newly won knowledge will pay huge and unexpected dividends.”
• “Space flights are merely an escape, a fleeing away from oneself, because it is easier to go to Mars or to the moon that it is to penetrate one’s own being.”
• “We choose to go to the moon. We choose to go to the moon in this decade not because it is easy but because it is hard.”
• “Whatever the benefits of space exploration, it is irresponsible to pursue them rather than facing the great dangers threatening humanity.”

“You cannot evade the fate of tomorrow, by avoiding it today.” The words of former President of the United States – Abraham Lincoln, echo the need to tackle feats of hardship as they come. Whilst the endeavours of space travel are certainly monumental, the exploration of our own time, space and mind present a similarly challenging task. Embedded within a society that consistently praises the workings of celebrities and their pursuit of materialism, many individuals begin to lose focus of a truly meaningful lifestyle. The pursuit of external validation comes as a result of media propaganda; finding a way out this chasm can prove to be just as difficult as stepping on the moon. Alas, there are still authentic methods in attaining personal satisfaction, notably in the form of living by good virtues. Overall, overcoming the need to be validated by others, serves as a fundamental stepping stone in becoming content with our existence.

Our society continues to glamorise an inauthentic lifestyle. The treatment of astronauts as celebrities, necessarily dwarfs our very own personal ambitions. When compared to the achievements of those involved in space exploration, it may become apparent that our own interests are not worthwhile in pursuing or validating. This effect is exacerbated in revelations within our society, a person’s perception of self-worth can easily be quantified with a dollar symbol or accounted for in collection of certain prestigious experiences. Overall, the effect on individuals has become dire, more and more individuals feel compelled to ‘buy’ into a lifestyle that pursues extravagance, luxury and validation. However, behind the veil of riches and gifts, we are solemnly welcomed to a shallow lifestyle, bereft of true emotions and passions. To live in such a way merely to benefit the whims of others, is an immense disservice to ourselves and our precious earthly time.

Whilst space exploration looks for clues outward, to find true meaning within our lives we must turn inward. Classical Chinese philosopher – Confucius once mused, “The virtues of courage and sincerity are bedrock to a wholesome lifestyle.” Just like how the first astronauts courageously boarded the spaceships, we must also show courage and faith in pursuing our dreams. These Chinese virtues denounce a life in pursuit of materialistic goods or arrogant achievements, opting instead for time spent in pursuing the subjective ideals of each individual. By acting with these virtues in mind, we take the first steps in fabricating an exploration of our most sincere desires, whatever they may be.

The temporality of our existence necessarily hastens our need to self-explore. The reassurance of certain death makes us realise that we should achieve meaningful self-introspection in earnest. Similar to how the astronauts identified their own ambitions, we must also execute the courage to pursue our own. Otherwise, how wasteful must if be to spend our precious waking moments living out a dream that wasn’t even ours to begin with. To truly explore our worldviews, we must turn towards the chasm that lies within ourselves. As the Socratic fable once proclaimed, “the unexamined life is not worth living.” Whilst the limits of space exploration within one’s lifetime may seem incomprehensible, finding the meaning within our own lives in an achievable task. Such actions denounce a life in pursuit of vanity, presenting a resolution that is authentic to each individual.

While the documentation of space travel is grand, it paradoxically guides us away from exploring our inner space. With the guarantee of death looming, it becomes imperative that we introspect our virtues to find a life that is worth living. By honing our actions to live by our own means, we become more free than astronauts ever could. The process of seeking out this way of living may seem daunting at first, however, we are eternally rewarded with furthering our own personal journeys.

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GAMSAT Theme Talk: Politics

The first step in writing a GAMSAT Section 2 essay is identifying the theme associated with the quotes presented. This blog post will go through potential ideas and sample essay structures.

• 1 Brainstorm Arguments & Ideas
• 2.1 Sample 1
• 2.2 Sample 2
• 2.3 Sample 3
• 3 Resources to improve your ideas and writing
• 4 Need Help?

Brainstorm Arguments & Ideas

• Same sex marriage bill, on Dec 2017, the right to marry in Australia was no longer determined by sex or gender, postal vote.
• This can be considered the correct course of action – equality, supporting love regardless of gender 
• Politics – make promises to get the popular vote, campaign promises made in good faith or do they hide more sinister intentions or cause division?
• E.g. Trump with the wall – pandering to right wing views? Create more divide in society 
• Kevin Rudd, promised to apologise for the wrongs that had been done and towards the Stolen Generation. → instigate movement towards reparations, acceptance, belonging, closing the gap → potential to create real societal change 
• Politics – manipulation, lies
• Removed from politics – direct, clear, unbiased, see the bigger picture → the common people are perhaps best to understand the issues that plague society, e.g. homelessness, poverty
• The true mark of a good government is able to listen and understand
• ‘Most removed’ –  Trump in terms of understanding the common man’s demise, their problems and pandering to this….’best politician’ provide a solution 
• ‘Most removed’ – Jacinda Ardern in terms of understanding the emotional state of the country
• Greta Thunberg – raising awareness of climate change, part of the grassroot initiating change, instigated multiple high school strikes across the world
• Compromise, gain support of other people
• E.g. Julia Gillard, allied herself with the Greens in order to gain leadership but had to introduce the Carbon tax 
• E.g. vaccine rollout, state and national leaders working together 
• 1917 Bolshevik revolution – Lenin/Trotsky to overthrow the Tsar (Soviet Union). In the aftermath of the 1917 Bolshevik revolution – Stalin learnt the art of compromise, use political rhetoric to oust Trotsky and gain leadership and the support of others → Five year plans disastrous for the economy, secret police, widespread poverty, famine
• Money = more resources, can get more involved 
• Power can help to enact change, e.g. Martin Luther King, Nelson Mandela, Aung San Suu Kyi   
• Power can corrupt, e.g. Macbeth

Possible Essay Structures

• E.g. Sam Dastyari and murky links with Chinese businessman, potential for foreign powers to influence politics or trade relations.
• E.g. Clive Palmer and use of money to support his political campaign, implies that only those with money can garner adequate support. –> https://theconversation.com/mineral-wealth-clive-palmer-and-the-corruption-of-australian-politics-117248
• E.g. Malaysia’s former Prime Minister Najib Razak being found guilty in the corruption trial over the multi-billion dollar 1MDB scandal. Consider the money that could have gone to the people, in supporting infrastructure, economic growth and improving welfare.
• In Australia, we have a separation of powers between the parliament, executive and judiciary
• In democratic countries, potential for lobby groups and protests to raise awareness about important issues
• Role of media in keeping people accountable, e.g. Tony Abbott and not wearing a mask (Sept 2021) subjected to same fines as others
• Donald Trump – building a Wall, replacing Obamacare, personality more important than promises of actual change. Trump recognises this and uses this to his advantage, appealing to minority/isolated/disenfranchised members of society by discrediting the media and their propagation of ‘fake news’. Give examples of what he have said and analyse.
• Kevin Rudd – promises to unify/eliminate barriers between Aboriginal Australians in modern society
• If we are to make positive change within our society we must hold those we elect into power accountable.
• Politics is often turned into a popularity contest rather than a campaign for what is beneficial for communities.
• This is further exacerbated by the use of money and power to further political agendas
• However, a truly successful politician is one who is able to compromise and understand the concerns of the common people.

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Clear and EFFECTIVE Section II writing (the five C’s)

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June 29, 2021 in  GAMSAT Section 2

The Five C’s

Clear and effective GAMSAT Section II writing

by Michael John Sunderland, 90plusgamsat | 29.06.21

Gosh, it’s been a minute.

I’ve focussed the bulk of my attention on extraordinary Section II writing for around 18 months now, and as a result of my tutoring and marking essays in the 90+ Facebook group, I’ve had the benefit of not only learning what scores well for myself, but how most students’ essays depart from what I learned about how to score highly in Section II.

This knowledge is going to help you fix half of all errors I see in GAMSAT writing, and let your ideas shine through.

It is an essential component to scoring highly in the GAMSAT (and communicating effectively in the written mode in general).

So let’s get to it!

The Five C’s

Comprehension, coherence/cohesion.

In the context of the GAMSAT comprehension of the material provided to you (the prompts) is crucial. You can otherwise think of it as relevance .

“Pre-prepared responses and responses that do not relate to the topic will receive a low score” – ACER information booklet

Your response must be dynamically relevant to what is being said. As a function of this, it is essential that you have comprehended the prompts – which is to say, you have considered that they are individually, and as a set, an invitation to discuss something about the internal or external world around you .

Note: I say around you because this is what you can authoritatively talk about, versus “capitalism through history” for instance – which you can only have limited knowledge about due to the breadth of the topic and the fact that you can only see it from one vantage point. Capitalism on your street as a child, however, you could talk about. Perhaps little Jimmy used to charge the rest of you an entry fee before playing his new Xbox. This would be a perfectly acceptable lens to discuss capitalism through, and one that would have far less potential pitfalls. But I digress.

The key word here is invitation.

I will paraphrase from the content at this link to distinguish how you might approach distinguishing what is being invited by the prompts.

What is being said is but one subjective “take” on the subject matter. Therefore, not just what is being said but how the author/speaker portrays that subject matter (for example with tone, bias, or persuasive elements) contributes to it being a unique perspective. Not just what is says, but what it does by making that remark and lastly what that might mean about the person or worldview, are crucial considerations.

In combination, there are five “takes” (prompts) on a situation provided by ACER; each trying to “do” something, and in the attempt at doing, meaning something about the author, or perhaps the topic. If you consider the five prompts like a discussion between expert academics, you might see that the moment provided by the inclusion of these five perspectives invites you to have whatever opinion you might have in the domain provided by these other five perspectives. It is critical that your opinion, however, is in the domain of the five other opinions. By in the domain, I mean relevant to what they are saying. If you just came into the middle of a conversation where five people were talking deeply and passionately about communism in China, and then you start talking about capitalism in America, they may go with you, but it would be a little dissonant and weird.

So, you must understand the domain of what is being discussed so you can respond harmoniously to it. Before speaking, comprehend what is already being spoken about, and then feel free to have whatever opinion you like about it, so long as you can intelligently back it up with cogent, coherently, and with clarity .

A simple way to ensure you prevent some of the most common errors here is to imagine you are in a social setting with academic experts standing around in a circle and each of these experts says one of the quotes. Thinking of them as experts will force you to show some academic respect for what is said by the others, even if you disagree with it; it will force you to consider that each view arises out of a comprehensive set of experiences; it will ensure you don’t reduce what is being said by all five people to one word (a common GAMSAT error); and finally it will ensure that what you are replying to the circle is relevant.. otherwise, it would be weird if what you said didn’t flow from what they said.

If you would like to read more about quote interpretation in the GAMSAT I wrote a blog on it, here: How to ACE GAMSAT Section II Quote Interpretation: Task A

“The quality of being clear, logical, and convincing; lucidity.”

To be cogent is to be strong, eloquent, and effective . There are three precursors to cogent writing (according to Kavane and Cavender, 1998):

• All its premises are true.
• It considers all relevant information (it doesn’t present only the part of the case that suits).
• It is logically valid (the conclusions are plausible based on the premises).

To write cogently necessitates a certain rigorousness with the truth. You don’t argue just what is convenient, but you are instead genuinely involved in a process of exploring the truth and the limits to it, including of your own perspective.

Many people tend to imitate the way I close my essays (which, while I don’t mind at all – I just want you to score well – I would recommend you at a minimum word it your own way as ACER have updated their information book to indicate that responses are now compared against past responses) but it oftentimes comes across as conceited as they use the words but the spirit of it is absent from their writing. I tend to finish by touching on the extent to which my view may or may not be valid, and considering others’ views. I do not casually consider the objections, nor commit the “strawman fallacy” wherein I fail to address the most significant objections, or inaccurately portray them. I don’t feel personally obliged in a thirty minute essay to have to have a 100% researched and considered argument, nor to know all of the objections, nor to necessarily be accurate in conveying all of them and rebuffing them. Who knows, maybe even though I have made a logically valid argument, there may be things I innocently did not consider or understand due to ignorance, lack of experience, or just a biased perspective. I do genuinely try my best to understand and consider other views, though. It’s not an argument, or a debating championship. I can simply consider it without needing to go into all the reasons why it’s wrong. In fact, to talk in such objective terms under time pressure is to not acknowledge the very real limitations we are under when writing GAMSAT essays. Even if we weren’t in our early 20’s, and we were experts in the field that we were talking about, we are still under time, and psychological, pressure writing on an unprompted topic, with no faculties of outside research. This is bound to introduce errors into our arguments, so we really have no place saying that someone else’s perspective is wrong in objective terms.

You must write in a way that is careful. As if it were a discussion with an expert in the field. Instead of imagining yourself standing facing the opposing view, both pushing your ideas on each other, position yourself instead to the side. View both views objectively weighing up the validity of both as write from this perspective. This doesn’t mean you have to write a paragraph dealing with the ‘counter-argument.’ I find this approach devolves into a suite of psychometric errors (e.g lacking fallibilism, which the idea that ‘I think I’m right, but I could be wrong; and I think you’re wrong but you could be right’; or appreciation of situadedness, which is an appreciation of how your personal bias and experiences colour your view of things in such a way that you cannot ever see a situation perfectly, limiting the extend to which you can claim what you say is objectively true). It simply means you write from altitude.

Some of the best GAMSAT essays, or at least Task B essays, don’t arrive at a position that is labelled as the truth, or correct. But simply explore the issue, arriving at a conclusion that is logically valid, and perhaps even strong, but never stating that it is the final word, and attempting throughout to ask questions that indicate not someone who is forcing an idea down your throat, but someone who is trying to work things out for themselves. You don’t need to be a know-it-all, but you should be objective and logical.

For more on how to structure your GAMSAT arguments logically, see my blog The Ontology of Task A Structure – Logic .

• The quality of being logical and consistent.
• The quality of forming a united whole (also: cohesive)

We have addressed logic above in cogency, so the emphasis here is on consistency, and how the ideas not only linearly progress in a way that is valid, but that the various elements of essay cohere together on a macroscopic (intro, body paragraphs, conclusion) and microscopic (intra-paragraph) level.

On a macroscopic level, each paragraph or unit should be designed to forward a central idea or argument and should be ordered around achieving that end. What that doesn’t necessarily mean is having a pre-conceived structure that you write because you think that’s just how it should be done. If you write a narrative at the start of your Task B’s because I do it, but you don’t understand why I did it, it can’t be effective. What it does mean is coming up with your own approach of how to write effectively, considering mine if you wish, and if you use mine exactly as I did, knowing why I did it, or at least how it helps you achieve your goal. There are no points for doing things the way I designed them, but there are for what my design helped me achieve (which, in essence, was having a strong idea, displaying the psychometric features I often talk about, and respecting the five C’s so that that idea could be effectively and clearly communicated).

I think of my essays like a skeleton. Imagine one in the anatomy department. The central idea and premises that support it form the backbone. Each premise (topic sentence) linearly supports the frame of the argument – like vertebrae stacked on top of each other. They aren’t ‘kind of in the same domain’ as the contention, which I often see and which leads to an almost impressionistic approach to addressing the topic, with broad brush strokes each covering an idea but not relating to each other linearly and directly. They are purposefully conceived to illustrate the plausibility of a single strong opinion (contention/thesis, or key insight) that you have about a dimension of the broader theme. When you know what you want to say, and why you believe what you want to say, the structure simply facilitates you conveying it effectively and in a way that can be received by the marker.

Let me give you an example, as I often talk about balancing abstract ideas with concrete examples to facilitate clarity (coming next). Imagine your mum/dad/someone you care about and know well asked you ‘what do you think is the best form of transport’ at the dinner table (random chat but, hey, who knows). Here is what many students would reply in a GAMSAT essay:

‘Trams can be good because they are economical, people have often used cars and they are quite popular despite being terrible for the environment, bikes are best because they have no carbon footprint aside from their production. Some people would say cars are the best because they are the most popular, but this fails to acknowledge the destruction to the environment.’

It is five or so ideas loosely related thematically, but no linear development of the ideas, or conclusion that forms naturally from viable premises. I might say

‘Best is a subjective judgement, based on one’s personal beliefs and prior experiences. In order to address the topic there must be criterion for what is designated ‘good’ and ‘bad’ (which are still opinion-based judgements on inherently neutral factors) which can loosely be achieved by which, at their extreme, would benefit humanity and objectives that ‘most’ human’s desire. While this is a ‘positive’ utilitarian approach and not necessarily correct in objective terms, for the purposes of framing a considered response it is the approach that will be used. Transport is, in many respects, the vehicle for the economy, which directly affects the lives of most people;  however longer-term environmental considerations are also an essential consideration as there is a ceiling value of economic output in order that that output remain sustainable for future humans. Therefore, there is a case for saying that the best form of transport is that which greatest facilitates the economic (or personal) objectives of humanity. It seems reasonable to conclude that each person’s use of transport allows them to fulfil their economic personal objectives, and there is no reason, in most cases, that people would utilise transport if not for the fulfilment of their personal or economic objectives. As this is different for each person, the mode of transport that fulfils that person’s economic and personal objectives is, initially, the best. Loosely, we can take whichever is the most popular. Of course, not all people are environmentally conscious, so the most popular forms must be indexed against the environmental impact of the use of that mode of transport. I imagine, then, that the answer would be walking, followed by cycling, public transport, bikes, cars, and finally planes.’

There is something distinct from this response compared to the rest. In this response, each idea follows on from the rest in a linear, daisy-chain-like fashion. No point can stand without the existence of the others. There are also many points where there is reference to an earlier idea. It’s like there’s glues, or stiches pulling together the many elements of the paragraph into a unified whole. Note also that there isn’t an idea at the outside that is forwarded directly. I don’t need to know it all. I show how I arrived at my thinking, and am questioning myself as I write. There is an introspective and reflective element to thinking about the prompts where you ask yourself what you believe, and then prod why you believe that. What basis do you have for that belief, and who would agree or disagree with you. Sorting through the prompts mentally and imagining how each argument would go, which you have the best supports for, which are the least contentious, which you have good examples or evidence for, and which you are passionate about, and then choosing one, is a skill in and of itself. There’s a certain judicious pragmatism that goes into selecting which path to go down, before you even begin.

When you have a framework for what you want to argue, or a skeleton, the rest becomes just laying flesh on top. But you must have a skeleton that can stand and that is logically valid and consistent, before doing that, lest you just write aimlessly. Furthermore, when your writing is ordered around a central idea, and the decisions that are made of what to write and how to write are made to facilitate that idea, your writing is naturally more coherent and cohesive.

On a microscopic level, it is also advisable to foreshadow in the introduction some of what is going to be said, and have a clear single strong contention/thesis that will be developed or explained in the essay at the end of the introduction. It is necessary that the topic sentences make the thesis and conclusion plausible. And advisable at the end of each paragraph to use a link . The link, at a minimum, must summarise what the reader was supposed to take away from the paragraph and make it explicit how that ties into the conclusion. If you can manage it, linking backward to the contention, as well as forward, via a segue, to the next paragraph is ideal. This can be achieved by using some of the words of the following topic sentence. This is like running a stich back to the intro to stich the intro and end of paragraph one together, and then another stitch tying paragraph one and two together.

Here’s an example of an essay of mine where I do just this. The prompts were about Globalisation and social responsibility.

This was my thesis (I have put in brackets what I referred to in place of the word ‘this’. As it stands beow it would be too long as a contention):

“…(the influence of Silicon Valley giants such as Facebook’s ability to monitor and influence human behaviour on a meta level) implies an urgent need for the reconsideration of the structural checks which were once imposed only on governments, to be laterally applied to these companies in order to ensure they are regulated to operate in socially responsible ways.”

And this is the end of body paragraph one, and the topic sentence of body paragraph two. I have boldened the cohesive elements.

“…The danger to democracy, civil, and social life clearly necessitates novel and comprehensive regulation in order to meet these challenges, if the poltico-economic ideals which are the foundations for contemporary Western societies are to be upheld.   The dangerousness implied in power necessitates regulation in order to champion socially responsible behaviour and ensure the delivery and preponderance of liberal and democratic political ideals, which characterise the politico-ontological frameworks of today’s Western societies …”

Note that there are terms linking the paragraph’s content explicitly to the contention, and terms foreshadowing the content of the next paragraph.

“The quality of being coherent and intelligible; clear”

Imagine you wrote the best ever GAMSAT essay possible. Imagine I was there in your seat acting through you, and not only that I was on fire that day. And then imagine when you finish the essay you put it in a glass box to hand to the marker to read. But the box was muddy and cloudy and the marker couldn’t make out a lot of what you and I had come up with together. Now inside the box is a 90+ essay. Maybe even a 95. We killed it! But the marker can’t quite access our ideas, or what we said. So in the end we fell short of what we could have.

I see this in SO many essays. So often there are good ideas, or in a tutorial I’ll ask what the student meant to say and they can tell me but what they tell me isn’t evident from the essay, and of course the marker doesn’t have the benefit of having you there to clarify. Essentially what is being marked is the ‘quality of thoughts and ideas’ and ‘how they are integrated into a meaningful response’ (that’s from the ACER info book). But the quality of your thoughts and ideas is delivered via the five C’s. The five C’s polish that glass box so it’s like it isn’t even there. Any impediment to the marker knowing what you mean is removed. They can see what you were thinking in a way that is crystal clear. But if you lack the five C’s, that box is all cloudy, the thoughts and ideas, no matter how good they are, can’t be seen and you will struggle to score well.

So, how can you make your writing more clear?

Firstly , through being clear on what you want to say, and planning effectively such that your ideas (skeleton) is logical and ordered. When you are clear internally, what you say will come out more clearly.

Secondly , when you are clear on what you want to say, be cautious about your word selection and the degree to which it enables you to be effective in your communication.  Oftentimes students use big words to sound academic and fancy. The issue is, more often than not, what they are saying is simple and not academically rigorous (due to time pressure), so it looks like a pig in lipstick. Pigs are actually cute, I don’t know why that’s the example that came to mind, but it’ll stay with you now 😉

In short, many people are exploring simple thoughts and ideas in complex terms , and what you want to be doing is exploring complex thoughts and ideas in simple terms.

A good rule of thumb I came up with is to ask ‘is there a simpler term that could communicate this?’ and if so I selected the simpler term. I would also ask myself, ‘does the inclusion of this more complex word enhance or diminish the effectiveness and clarity?’ Sometimes there’s no other word that will do as nicely as the one you use.. for example ‘precipitously’ .. sometimes there’s just a time for saying ‘a precipitous increase.’ In this case you could say ‘a large increase’ but it doesn’t have quite the same impact or meaning. They’re not quite the same. So I would go for ‘precipitous’ (assuming I hadn’t already used many complex words previously in that paragraph. If the average 13-14 year old can’t easily understand what you are saying, it’s not written simply enough. Remember, ACER say in the info book that ‘language and structure is only marked insofar as it contributes to the thoughts and ideas, not in isolation’. (I added the underline FYI).

Annd, finally..

‘Briefness, or brevity; to be concise’

Concision is using the fewest words possible to communicate an idea effectively. Anything more is too-much and will detract momentum and pace from the development of your writing. You want to write generously to the marker and in such a way that they can move through what you say easily and enjoyably. If they enjoy your writing, they will like you, and if they like you, you will incur their positive bias, which, if it doesn’t help, can’t hurt; and avoid their negative bias, which if it doesn’t hurt you, might have.

Writing that is not concise can feel overwhelming, confusing, or boring. When you are not generous to the marker in the way that you write, they feel that marking your essay is work. GAMSAT markers might have ten minutes at best per essay, and they are reading essay after essay of drivel. You want to be the shining light that stands out, and simplifies their night. The essay that makes it feel for a moment like it isn’t work to mark. The essay that gives them relief of the burden of trying to figure out what people mean. Trust me, I’ve marked enough essays, it’s not the easiest or most fun work. But when you get one that flows it’s like “AHA! YES! Thank you!!” And that feeling of elation is a very good lens through which a marker might assess your ability to be a doctor.

Anything less that concise creates work, and this incurs grumpiness. You don’t want a grumpy marker deciding your Section II score, do you?

How to be concise?

• Reduce unnecessary words, phrases, or sentences that do not directly forward your central argument. I have, at the last minute, cut out whole sentences (multiple of them) ruthlessly. I hack like a madman at the end of my essays. Anything that is not utterly necessary can go.
• Eliminate filler phrases such as ‘needless to say.’
• Write in the active (versus passive) voice. In the active voice the subject does the verb. In the passive voice the subject is done by the verb. Basically, active is punchy, passive is long winded and takes more words and ruins momentum.

Example (passive): “Lesser men were slayed by the dragon queen” (Borrrrinnnnng.) Example (active): “The dragon queen slayed lesser men.” (Yas queen. Slay gurl.)

If you would like some help learning where you are lacking concision or clarity I recommend copy-pasting your writing into the Hemingway App online. It will break down for you where you are using the passive voice, where you are using too many complex words, and which sentences are hard to read.

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GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator

Welcome to our comprehensive and user-friendly GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator. This tool is designed to help you practice and perfect your essay writing skills in preparation for the GAMSAT Section 2 .

Learn How to Create an Essay from a Quote

To help you get the most out of our GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator, we've created a video tutorial that shows you how to create an essay from a quote. This video will guide you through the process of understanding the quote, brainstorming ideas, creating an essay outline, and writing the essay.

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How to make the most out of gamsat section 2 quote generator.

Start by selecting the task you want to work on with our GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator. You can choose Task A, Task B, or both. This flexibility allows you to focus on the areas you feel need the most practice. Remember, GAMSAT Section 2 requires you to break down themed quotes into smaller chunks of plausible explanations, delivering a high-quality essay that showcases your vocabulary and communication skills. Learn more about GAMSAT Section 2 .

Choose Your Task

Start by selecting the task you want to work on with our GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator. You can choose Task A, Task B, or both. This flexibility allows you to focus on the areas you feel need the most practice.

1. Random Section 2 Quotes ‍

If you prefer a spontaneous approach, the random method will generate a quote for you to work on without any specific theme. This is a great way to challenge your adaptability and creativity with our GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator. Read how to Study for Section 2

2. Theme based Section 2 Quotes

If you want to focus on a specific topic, you can choose from over 100 themes with our GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator. This method allows you to delve deep into a particular subject, honing your knowledge and writing skills in that area. Remember, writing for Section 2 requires an extensive knowledge base across many subjects. It's recommended to start broad in your approach, research around the subject, and perfect your writing style. Find out how to study for Section 2.

3. Past GAMSAT Section 2 Quotes

Want to know what to expect in the actual exam? Choose this method to practice with quotes from past GAMSAT exams with our GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator. This will give you a feel for the kind of quotes you might encounter on the test day. Reviewing previous GAMSAT essay topics and understanding the main marking criteria can help improve your essay writing skills. Check out these GAMSAT Section 2 essay examples .

Use the Timer with Our GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator

Our GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator also includes a timer feature. This allows you to simulate the exam scenario and practice writing your essays within a set time limit. It's a great way to improve your time management skills and ensure you can express your thoughts clearly and concisely under exam conditions. Remember, overcoming writer’s block is a common issue faced by many students preparing for GAMSAT Section 2. To overcome writer’s block, it's recommended to be active in your writing style, find your personal touch, and practice writing in your free time. Read more on how to beat writer's block in Section 2 GAMSAT.

Overcoming writer’s block is a common issue faced by many students preparing for GAMSAT Section 2. To overcome writer’s block, it's recommended to be active in your writing style, find your personal touch, and practice writing in your free time. Read more on how to beat writer's block in Section 2 GAMSAT.

Start practicing today with our GAMSAT Section 2 Quote Generator and take a step closer to acing your GAMSAT exam!

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Now that you are practicing your GAMSAT essay writing, make sure that you have read our complete guide to  Section 2 . If you are still unsure how you should be focusing your efforts when writing your GAMSAT Section 2 essay responses, visit our  GAMSAT Section 2 Syllabus Guide . Our comprehensive and completely Free GAMSAT Quote generator t o practice for Section 2. Use this tool to practice GAMSAT Essays and apply the appropriate writing techniques. 

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When I was studying for Gamsat I spent hours looking for resources for section 2. If you're looking for your own resources for Gamsat section 2 I've written this short article to help you out so you can save yourself from spending hours like I did.

So a good strategy for section 2 is to get a good overview of current ideas and theories in a range of broad topics.

This way you'll be able to work them into your arguments in your essays and appear well informed and able to relate your arguments to the real world.

So if you can have a reasonably good idea of the most important historical ideas, plus the latest developments in a range of commonly discussed disciplines such as philosophy, politics, economics, art etc. that is a good strategy to adopt for section two.

Here's three useful resources which will help you achieve just that.

The first resource on our list is a website which has literally thousands of videos covering many topics.

This is TED which is a non profit organization which is devoted to spreading ideas in the form of short talks presented by experts in their fields from every discipline and culture who seek a deeper understanding of the world.

The average length of these videos is about 20 minutes so you can watch them in easily digestible little chunks.

The Meaning of Things

This resource is a book written by well known British philosopher A.C. Grayling.

It consists of a series of brief articles which aim to help the reader think about life, common human dilemmas and universal difficulties. Encouraging introspection into life and experience to help us achieve a life worth living.

Some of the topics covered include include courage, love, betrayal, ambition, cruelty, wisdom, passion, beauty and death.

This book will help you generate concepts to support your arguments in your Gamsat section two essays.

50 Big Ideas

Another great book - 50 Big Ideas You Really Need to Know by Ben Dupré is a concise, accessible and popular guide to the central tenets of Western thought. Every important principle of philosophy, religion, politics, economics, the arts and the sciences is profiled in a series of short illustrated essays, complemented by an informative array of timelines and box features. Platonism, The Soul, Communism, Aristotelianism, Faith, Fascism, The Golden rule, Atheism, Racism, Altruism, Secularism, Feminism, Pluralism, Fundamentalism, Islamism, Liberty, Creationism, Capitalism, Toleration, War, Globalization, Scepticism, Duty, Classicism, Reason, Utopia, Romanticism, Punishment, Liberalism, Modernism, Materialism, Democracy, Surrealism, Relativism, Conservatism, Censorship, Utilitarianism, Imperialism, Big Bang, Existentialism, Nationalism, Chaos, Evil, Social contract, Evolution, Fate, Republicanism, Relativity, Quantum mechanics, Gaia.

These three resources are great way to get going with your Gamsat section 2 practice.

Quote Generator

The final resource on my list is a quote generator which will help you to generate an unlimited number of quotes on hundreds of topics in a format virtually identical to the real test.

When doing your practice essays I always recommend typing them under timed conditions as in the real thing so you can practice your timing skills and also improve your typing speed and accuracy.

The second thing I recommend is to always write two in a row one directly after the other to replicate test conditions so you can develop the mental agility to quickly switch from one topic to another.

Further Resources

For more detailed help with your GAMSAT essay writing please refer to Griffiths GAMSAT Review which contains an essay writing model which practically allows you to have your essays pre-written before you even walk into the test.

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Theme: Poverty

• You might be poor, your shoes might be broken, but your mind is a palace. Frank McCourt, Angela's Ashes
• Poverty is the parent of revolution and crime. Aristotle
• We are not rich by what we possess but by what we can do without. Immanuel Kant
• There are people in the world so hungry, that God cannot appear to them except in the form of bread. Mahatma Gandhi
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In each of the two tasks in GAMSAT ® Section 2, you will be presented with five quotes that relate to one or more themes. Your task is to identify one of these themes and write a piece in response. Thus, it is important to remember that the quotes are there as a prompt or a guide, rather than a traditional essay question. It is not necessary to respond directly to any or all of the quotes, but rather to respond to the themes and ideas contained in the quotes.

Understanding the Theme

• Read the first two quotes
• Compare both quotes - Are there any related words or ideas?
• Note down any common words/themes
• Read the third quote - Are there any common ideas you can add to your list?
• Repeat with the rest of the quotes

After this process you should have a “word cloud” that points to the key overarching theme - However, it’s important to note that the stimuli are often designed such that there are a number of sub-themes that may be relevant. The point here is not to limit the scope of your writing but to expand it and bring in other relevant ideas - In fact it’s fine to draw on either the overarching theme or a sub-theme, so long as you demonstrate that you have actively engaged with the stimuli.

Let’s look at a worked example below:

• I don’t know half of you half as well as I shouldn’t like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve. (J.R.R. Tolkien)
• After a good dinner one can forgive anybody, even one’s own relations. (Oscar Wilde)
• Water cannot be cut and blood is thicker than water. (Malaysian Proverb)
• It is an absolute human certainty that no one can know his own beauty or perceive a sense of his own worth until it has been reflected back to him in the mirror of another loving, caring human being. (John Joseph Powell)
• Isn’t everyone a part of everyone else? (Budd Schulberg)

What are some themes you can identify? Let’s break it down quote by quote:

As you can see there are multiple themes that you could draw from the above stimuli - It’s important to note that you don’t need to write about a theme that is presented in all of the quotes provided, you can choose a theme that may only appear once or twice in the stimuli.

Now it’s time to implement all the above steps in practice! We’ve prepared a GAMSAT ® essay writing PDF checklist you can download below. It contains a step-by-step checklist to help you identify the themes and write a high-scoring GAMSAT ® essay.

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Hi guys, I've recently tried to swap over from doing reflective essays because I feel like I was just writing incoherent sh*te (can upload some of them if anyone wouldn't mind taking a look). So, I gave an argumentative essay a try, not even sure if I got the structure right. My GAMSAT preparation kinda went off the rails so this is my first time writing an essay in about 3 weeks. It took me 5 minutes to do the planning and 35 minutes to do the writing, way over board but was lenient with myself. Anyways, here it is. Appreciate any and all feedback, though I feel like it will be mostly negative xD, hope all your preparation is going swell.

"I’m tired of this discussion of capitalism and socialism; we live in the 21st century; we need an economic system that has democracy as its underpinnings and an ethical code. "

Democratic economics; friend or faux

Economics, the concomitant apogee of human accomplishment and product of human failure, is a divisive topic. The virtues and vices of various economic doctrines have been argued throughout human history. However, the true wealth of a nation lives in the populace and their desires must be heard to ensure it’s stability. By implementing a framework in which the desire of the electorate is heard, economics can become more anthropic and equitable. Furthermore, this will allow for the ability to eradicate ethical issues. Social growth must irrevocably accompany that of economics.

An economic system governed by democratic principles is the only sustainable avenue to pursue economic growth. Capitalism and socialism are inherently flawed economic ideologies due to the proclivity for those in power to turn to self interest and proclivity. As the politically powerful ascend the rungs of politics, they lose sight of the desires of the layman. As they enter a new class, their vision can be clouded by economic and personal desires. These ambitions are fueled and paid for by the proletariat, whose backs must be broken and whose wallets are drained. This is clearly exemplified by the actions of Charles Haughey, the Taoiseach of Ireland in the mid 1980’s. Haughey introduced a “brown paper culture” unlike any this country has seen throughout its tenured history. These actions must be regulated by a solid democratic framework. We must be able to stand up to the leaders who prioritise the fruits of the populace rather than the populace itself. Robust democratic principles would provide this. The ability to enact change as we see fit and elect politicians who we feel represent the desires of the populace is imperative. Without the manifestation of the electorate's desires, the trundling wheels of economics should cease to turn.

An increasingly democratic involvement would undoubtedly allow for more ethical decisions to be made. It is no secret that economic growth comes with a lofty price tag, paid for by our planet and its inhabitants. In 2019, the Amazon rainforest was burning down and President Bolsonaro of Brazil ignored it. Bolsonaro opted for a policy of non involvement to increase the land available for agricultural use. The “lungs of the Earth” paying the price of undemocratic economics displays the need for an increasing involvement of the people. Increasing involvement in environmental regulations imposed on companies and governments would amend the lack of ethical code in business. This extends to human right infringements as well, in internment and labour camps several nations use across the globe.

An increasingly complex democracy could result in slow bureaucratic decisions, however. If all major economic decisions required the saying of the citizens, efficiency would drop significantly. With this drop in efficiency, a decrease in quality of living would come for many living in Western countries. Our current economic system gave rise to all the technological advancements we have today, by pulling levers that have been in place since the Industrial revolution. Yet, the levers are malfunctioning. As the populace grows more educated on the damages unbridled economic growth causes, the desire grows for increasing involvement. A slow bureaucratic process is hardly favourable to the posterity of our planet.

A liberal democracy is not truly liberal until this extends to economics as well. Those in power are pulling levers that have begun to senesce. It is up to us to alter the paradigm, making a new machine. These changes make for a democratic today and a better tomorrow.

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