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How to write a personal statement

If you want to give current article to your teenage child you might be right. But adults can be interested in it too. Personal statement is a piece of individual writing a person usually encloses to his or her university application. It's never too late to study, universities accept not only young and enthusiastic people but representatives of all ages. Anyway, we think it's vital to know how to write a personal statement. Who knows maybe next year you'll express desire to go back to school! Internet as usual can offer you a huge amount of personal statement examples for any case. We prefer to stick to theory that it should be unique and reflect best traits of your character and has a full story of your achievements. Personal statement format is not strict but of course there is a plan to follow. First is introduction. It should be catchy and captivate reader's attention from first sentence. In several blocks tell briefly but vividly about your education, experience and skills. Don't ask anyone for help, use your own words and phrases, let the committee know what a person you are. Search for tips on how to write a personal statement but do writing part yourself, without appropriating anyone's thoughts. In personal financial statement explain need of scholarship or financial aid. In personal mission statement define your primary goals you plan to achieve in life with help of high school.

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Not to get lost under flood of information about personal statements, everyone should know that for each type of high school there should be a unique piece of paper.

Personal statement for graduate school won't contain any information about your desperate need of financial assistance in studying. This is what a personal financial statement for.

Planning to become a famous doctor and getting a medical certificate? Write a medical school personal statement, describe your preference. There is surely a noble reason for choosing career of doctor. After finishing studies and applying for a place in hospital as an intern there is a necessity to write residency personal statement. And again you say what made you think this very hospital would provide the best experience for you.

Dreaming of a career in jurisprudence? Be sure to make best law school personal statement ever. The competition between applicants is quite hard, as there are plenty of them. With moderate or low grades knowledge of how to write a personal statement is not just important, it's vital. When looking through samples ignore those that don't belong to necessary sphere. Medical school personal statement examples are not proper when applying for law school.

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Use of correct personal statement format is significant. Grades matter too but a brilliant piece of writing may win you a place in high school. Devote as much time as possible to compose it. Even when making a personal statement for college do your best. Examine your work several times, make notes, change part you don't like, give it to you teacher or senior to evaluate. Personal mission statement examples will help to make a right decision and sometimes completely change your mind.

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The Personal Statement of Military Compensation

June 5, 2017 MilitaryDollar 2 Comments

Do you know how much money you make? I know it seems like a silly question, but…do you?

A lot of people look at their Leave and Earnings Statement at least occasionally, but when was the last time you studied your Personal Statement of Military Compensation? I mean really studied it. Could you name your basic pay, housing allowance, and subsistence allowance amounts without looking them up? How about special pay and bonuses? Do you know how much you save on taxes due to tax-free allowances, or what your benefits are worth?

(don’t get mad at me for implying you don’t, it’s just…I know a lot of people who had no idea this document existed)

It’s hard to know how much you are spending and how much you are saving if you aren’t familiar with how much you earn. It’s even more difficult to compare your compensation to civilians. Unlike a civilian job where you might agree to a set salary or hourly wage, military members have a lot of variables in their pay. And, they change often. I’ve been in the military just over 13 years, and from what I can tell my military compensation has changed TWENTY-NINE times. Between PCSes, promotions, and longevity raises, our pay changes frequently.

So, I’ve decided to break down the Personal Statement of Military Compensation (PSMC) for you, right here on Military Dollar. You can just follow along with my screen shots, but I think it’d be better if you log into MyPay real quick and pull yours up. Also, I’m going to block out my numbers because it can tell you information about me that I’m not comfortably sharing quite yet. So it’s really best if you look up your own. I’ll wait.

Here’s a picture of a puppy while we wait:

Ready? Okay, good.

Part One: The Introduction

Right at the top of the PSMC, they’ve put in a handy-dandy explanation of why the PSMC exists. Nice! Let’s see…making your compensation more visible when applying for credit or loans including home loans. I like it. That is helpful because it can help you prove your expected income to mortgage lenders who may not fully understand military compensation.

Then comes what I consider the big one: comparing your military compensation package to a civilian employment offer. I should probably write a whole post on comparing military and civilian salaries and benefits. There is a lot to consider. If you (like some I’ve known) are just looking at basic pay vs the offered salary, you are missing out on a lot of context. For now, just follow the instructions at the top describing how to compare them.

If your decision to leave the military and take on a civilian job includes a possible move, you can look up the BAH for the applicable area here . Subtract out the BAH you are currently receiving, add in the monthly/annual BAH for the new area, and then make the comparison.

The Summary included in this part includes a number for “Added value of Service-estimated indirect compensation.” I don’t know about you, but my PSMC only includes my Federal Tax Advantage. You actually receive a lot more indirect compensation than that. We’ll get to the details in Part Three.

Part Two: Direct Compensation

This is the most straightforward part of the PSMC. It should match your LES monthly amounts, unless you’ve PCSed or promoted since March. This tells you the flat out monetary compensation you should be receiving, monthly and annually. In addition to matching your LES, it should also match the military pay charts and BAH calculator results for your rank/location/dependent status. If it doesn’t, you probably need to contact your local finance squadron to figure out what is going on.

Side story that isn’t related to the PSMC: If you are receiving more money than you should, that is bad . Don’t think the military won’t figure out they’ve been paying you too much. I received about $3,600 extra when I first commissioned. I reported it on three separate occasions to Finance and was assured each time that I was the one who was wrong, even though my paychecks were significantly higher than my friends. Guess what? Almost two years later, Finance came for their money. They wanted to withhold my entire paycheck until the “debt” was paid, but I convinced them to take it out over the course of a year. Luckily, I’d had friends warn me about these types of situations and I’d had the money sitting in a savings account. I know others that weren’t so lucky.

Okay, so now you have the numbers for your basic compensation (basic pay, BAH, and BAS), special pay and bonuses (as applicable), and expense allowances (as applicable). These are known as your Direct Compensation. If somebody asked “how much money do you make” this is *probably* the answer you will give.

Are you surprised? I can’t tell you how many conversations I’ve had with active duty personnel who were amazed at the number. The most common reason I’ve seen is because they were only considering their basic pay when counting up their salary. But civilians don’t usually get separate allowances for housing and subsistence, they have to pay for that out of their salaries. So to leave it out of the equation is just weird to me. Why wouldn’t you count it? It’s part of your paycheck! (I actually once had somebody tell me the reason they don’t count it is because they have to have a place to live and they have to eat. Ummmmm….pretty sure that applies to civilians, too)

If you aren’t getting BAH and BAS but you are getting housing and food for “free,” you need to consider how much that is worth. If you think you are living on $40,000/year, but you are also getting free housing and food, guess what? You aren’t living on $40,000/year. You’re probably living on something closer to $55,000/year. It looks like Note 2 accounts for this, but since I have BAH I can’t be sure what it would say. If somebody is in this situation, it’d be great to hear from you about what it says.

Why is the value of BAH and BAS important? Because you need to know how much it actually costs you to maintain your standard of living. Whether you are considering getting out or planning your retirement, you are eventually going to have a situation where housing and food aren’t just given to you, either in the form of an allowance or a dorm. If you don’t know how much you spend, you won’t be able to realistically plan your life. And we are all about planning here at Military Dollar.

Part Three: Service Estimated Indirect Compensation

Now for the fun part. How much are all of the intangibles you enjoy really worth?

Remember, eventually you will have to pay for these things on your own. Healthcare, taxes, education, lawyers, travel…there are a lot of benefits that boost the overall value you receive in exchange for military service. But they are admittedly more difficult to define, so it’s going to take a bit of work to figure out how much each one is worth. I’ll walk through the topics to discuss some possible amounts, but you should also run the numbers for yourself.

Medical Care

The amount you would pay for medical care in the civilian sector is obviously going to vary quite a bit based on your medical history, family composition, how much the employer pays, etc etc. Based on a quick internet search, it looks like somebody my age and health history, who has no dependents, would pay about $400/month or $4,800 year. And then I guess I would have a deductible and would have to pay for prescriptions. I’m going to call this $6,000 per year in indirect compensation.

Federal Tax Advantage

Again, this is going to vary wildly based on your personal situation. This number is going to be based on your BAH + BAS as well as your overall tax bracket and allowable deductions. Regardless, the amount will be considerable for pretty much everybody. Last year my tax advantage was nearly equal to my overall tax liability, which means I would have had to pay twice the federal tax if BAH and BAS weren’t tax-free allowances. That’s a lot of money.

I have no idea what the average tax advantage is across the military, but looking at BAH + BAS across a variety of ranks and locations it looks like a $1,300/month total might be fair as an average. That’s $15,600/year. At an average federal income tax rate of 13.5% ( per this article from The Motley Fool ), Social Security tax of 6.2%, and Medicare tax of 1.45%, that’s an average tax percentage savings of 21.15% on that $15,600. That equals a cash savings of $3,299.40/year. Let’s call it $3,300. Higher ranks and those in high BAH areas will have significantly higher savings.

Military Pension

Because there are so many reasons a person might not retire from the military, I don’t feel comfortable assigning a number to this. Maybe if a person has achieved retirement sanctuary, but that isn’t the case for me and likely isn’t the case for most of you. So I’m not going to assign an annual value. However, based on my understanding of how the DOD funds the pension, this is probably worth several thousand dollars. But like I said, I’m leaving it at $0.

The part I circled in red is applicable if you are already eligible for retirement. This is a great way to discover your potential retirement income.

Uniformed Services Thrift Savings Plan

For now, the DOD isn’t kicking in automatic or matching contributions to members’ TSP accounts, so I’ll leave this one at $0 too. But , that’s going to change once the Blended Retirement System  begins on January 1st, 2018. The government contributions to the TSP will start adding hundreds to thousands of dollars in indirect compensation for everybody who falls under the BRS. Or maybe they will consider it direct compensation? Definitely something to pay attention to on the 2018 PSMC!

Death and Survivor Programs

I don’t consider Servicemembers Group Life Insurance to be indirect compensation as I have to pay for it unless I’m deployed. Plus, the rates aren’t much different from what I can get in the civilian sector. However, the Death Gratuity is kind of like a free life insurance policy. Based on the cost for SGLI, I’d estimate the Death Gratuity (seriously the worst name ever) is worth about $7/month, or $84/year. I’m going to round that up to $100 just to keep the numbers round. This certainly isn’t a life-changing amount of money, but it’s a nice benefit. The value of the Survivor’s Benefit Plan has a lot of variables and is worth nothing to me (no spouse) so I’ll mark that as $0.

Ummm…not indirect compensation. Why is this here? It’s nice to know your paycheck will grow over time, but this is about what you are earning  now.

State/local Tax Advantage

I’m going to mark this as a $0 value because I don’t pay state taxes, but if you do this might save you several hundred dollars each year.

Commissary and the Exchange

Depending on how often you shop there and how much you buy, this can be worth hundreds or thousands of dollars each year. If you believe those signs at the commissary, you save about 30% shopping there. The US Bureau of Labor Statistics says the average American family spends about $4,000/year on groceries, so 30% savings would mean $1,200 stays in your pocket. I’m not sure how much, if any, the Exchange saves you…those Coach purses, TVs, and DeWalt tools are nice, sure, but those aren’t needs the way food is. So we’ll just say $1,200 for this category.

Federal Long-Term Care Insurance Program

I looked into this years ago, but haven’t recently. I do remember thinking this could save me money, if I decided to use it. But I didn’t, and I’m not sure how many people do. It doesn’t seem to be a very well known benefit. Anybody out there have any experience with it?

The nice thing abut the FLTCIP is that you can buy it for parents, which is why I looked into it. If you might need to take care of your parents as they age, you should look into it too.

Education Programs

Guys. Guys. If you haven’t yet realized how much money the military spends on college degrees, you aren’t paying attention. In addition to letting you CLEP classes and use Tuition Assistance, nearly all Active Duty and many Guard and Reserves also qualify for either the Montgomery or Post-9/11 GI Bills, sometimes both. I ran the math a couple months ago for the GI Bills, and it is worth tens if not hundreds of thousands of dollars. I priced out the amount I would use if I went to my hometown university, and it was worth $88,000. And that’s for a relatively cheap school! If I stay in 20 years, that’s like a $4,400/year value.

Even crazier, I found one school where the Post-9/11 GI Bill could potentially be worth $240,000. Considering you can fully qualify for the GI Bill after only 3 years of service, you could conceivably consider this benefit worth $80,000/year in indirect compensation. I’m going to go with the $4,400 for my running total, but this shows you the range of possible values.

Services, Counseling, and Legal

The value for you will depend on what you choose to take advantage of, but there are a lot of good options here. Personally, I’ve had a strange year where I’ve needed to visited the Legal office several times. I’ve already received about $400 worth of value from that. And notice those Personal Financial Counseling sessions? I’ll be talking more about them soon, but pay attention. Civilians pay hundreds and even thousands of dollars for what we get for free.

Space-A Travel

I haven’t done this yet myself, but anybody who has knows it can save you hundreds of dollars. It may be a bit of a pain in the behind, but I can see where I’d get a lot of value out of it if I were retired.

Tricare Dental Program

Again, I’m single-no-dependents so this is a $0 value for me right now. But based on what I’ve heard from civilian friends, this is potentially worth quite a bit. I’ve heard of people spending thousands of dollars on getting a tooth pulled. Yikes!

A Very Rough Total Indirect Compensation

This obviously is going to vary by huge amounts based on your personal situation, but here’s a rough guesstimate of what the indirect compensation could be worth.

• Medical Care: $6000
• Federal Tax Advantage: $3300
• Death Gratuity: $100
• Commissary: $1200
• GI Bill: $4400
• Legal: $400

Total: $15,400. That’s $15,400 for a single-no-dependents person who doesn’t take advantage of a lot of the benefits offered. Not too shabby.

So when you are looking at your paycheck and thinking “ugh, I don’t get paid nearly enough” do yourself a favor and whip out your Personal Statement of Military Compensation. It may not make you feel rich, but hopefully it makes you realize your total compensation isn’t terrible. It’s often much higher than people think.

Were you already familiar with the Personal Statement of Military Compensation? If not, were you surprised by what you saw?

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Reader Interactions

June 10, 2017 at 11:42 pm

I had never looked at the PSMC previous to coming across this article, so I was very happy to come across it!

In response to Direct Compensation for BAH…I just moved out of gov housing and was receiving just over 10.00/month for BAH. On the BAH or quarters…line of my PSMC it says over 700/monthly and over 8,000/annualy. If I did not live in housing my BAH would be over 1200/month. I am not sure if this supports what you were thinking above in the article or not!

June 11, 2017 at 3:57 pm

Yay! Introducing people to new things is totally the point!

Um, the $700 vs $1200 thing is weird! I wonder why that is?

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August 31, 2023

VA Personal Statement: 5 Best Things to Include

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Writing a VA personal statement can help show an unquestionable link between your military service and disability. 

While it’s not required, we highly recommend writing a VA personal statement to help strengthen your VA disability claim. 

This post will look at the 5 Best Things to Include in Your VA Personal Statement .

We’ll also explain why a personal statement is important and what you shouldn’t say in your VA personal statement. 

To wrap up, we have a VA personal statement example to help get you started. 

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What is a VA Personal Statement?

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A VA personal statement allows you to tell the VA how your condition affects your daily life and your ability to function. 

Writing a VA personal statement gives you the opportunity to advocate for yourself and ensure your condition is accurately evaluated. 

Personal statements aren’t lengthy, only a few paragraphs, but they can be critical to receiving a positive response about your claim. 

If you’ve ever wished to talk about things “in your own words,” a VA personal statement is your opportunity! 

While a VA disability personal statement isn’t a guarantee of a winning claim, it gives the VA an “insider’s look” at the severity of your condition and how it’s connected to your service. 

Finally, your VA personal statement can help capture any unseen impacts your disability caused that may not be fully captured in your medical records alone. 

5 Best Things to Include in Your VA Personal Statement:

• The name of the VA disability you’re claiming 
• When you first experienced symptoms of your condition 
• Precise, concise details about the circumstances around your incident, accident, or illness 
• Current medical treatment you receive for your condition 
• How your condition negatively impacts your life, work, and social functioning 

Don’t worry about having exact dates if you can’t remember them; even mentioning the year of the incident or accident can help. 

For example, “ While serving in Afghanistan for Operation Enduring Freedom in 2001, I developed severe PTSD that has negatively affected my daily life.” 

Your VA personal statement should be specific, detailing the circumstances around your condition and how it affects your quality of life. 

Use your VA personal statement as a way to paint a picture of the impact of your condition. 

Keeping your statement with the most essential details will help the VA rater when sifting through your claim. 

What Should I Avoid in My VA Personal Statement?

• Unsubstantiated medical claims, including self-diagnoses or speculative medical claims
• Unprofessional language, including jargon, slang, and offensive language 
• Complaints about the VA process, even if you are frustrated about the situation
• Irrelevant personal history not applicable to the current disability claim 
• Graphic or inappropriate details 
• Irrelevant accomplishments or achievements that aren’t relevant to the claim
• Political or controversial opinions that take the focus away from your condition  

It’s also best to avoid blaming or finger-pointing for the cause of your condition and instead focus on your experience and the effects of your disability. 

PRO TIP: When writing a VA personal statement, avoid being vague and never lie about your condition.

For example, Instead of saying, “ I have anxiety ,” write about how it affects your daily life. “ My anxiety prevents me from attending social situations with many people, and I’ve seen a negative impact on my social functioning ” gives a clearer picture of your condition’s impact. 

In addition, you don’t want to embellish your situation because the VA will find out if you are lying, which runs the risk of perjury. 

You also want to avoid any filler that takes away from the heart of your VA personal statement and isn’t relevant to the disability you want compensation for. 

While detail is important, too much detail may make it hard for the VA rater to fully grasp the severity of your condition. 

A VA personal statement is essential because it helps paint a picture of your illness, injury, or disability and allows the VA an inside look at its effect on your daily life. 

When you write a VA personal statement, you are detailing your condition or disability, frequency, and severity, which helps paint a clear picture. 

A VA personal statement can also help foster a sense of human connection between you and the VA’s evaluators. 

Your VA personal statement may also clear any discrepancies in your medical records, especially if something isn’t well-documented or fully explained in your records. 

In addition, a VA personal statement can help complete your Fully Developed Claim , speeding up the claims process and your odds of winning your claim.

You can also bring a copy of your personal statement to your Compensation & Pension (C&P) exam for reference. 

While you can’t submit additional evidence at your C&P, you CAN bring copies of documents you’ve previously submitted. 

Note: Each claim requires its own personal statement, and you should submit one for every condition. 

We’ve got you covered if you’re looking for VA personal statement examples. 

We understand and respect that it can be challenging to write about the condition you experience and the potential trauma behind it. 

However, detailing the impact of your condition can significantly impact the outcome of your claim. 

Here’s a VA personal statement example:

“During my service in [branch of service] from [start date] to [end date], I was exposed to traumatic events that left a lasting impact on my mental and emotional well-being. I was subjected to [briefly describe the traumatic events or experience you were exposed to]. These experiences led to PTSD, significantly affecting my ability to reintegrate into civilian life and maintain a sense of normalcy.

The symptoms of PTSD, including persistent anxiety, intrusive memories, hyper-vigilance, nightmares, and avoidance behavior, have made it incredibly difficult for me to engage in day-to-day activities and establish stable relationships. The trauma’s aftermath has led to sleep disruptions, difficulty concentrating, and heightened stress responses in certain situations. 

These symptoms have interfered with my capacity to hold steady employment, contribute meaningfully to my family and community, and experience a sense of safety and well-being.

I have actively sought help for my PTSD through therapists, medical professionals, and support groups. I enclosed my medical records to confirm my ongoing efforts to address and manage my condition.

Despite my best efforts, my PTSD symptoms continue to profoundly impact my life, including relationships, daily life, and my ability to work or engage in social activities. My goal in seeking VA disability compensation is to ease the financial strain caused by these challenges and to access the resources and assistance I need to regain a resemblance of normalcy and functionality.”

A VA lay witness is a different perspective from a VA personal statement.

A VA lay witness statement, or buddy statement is a written statement from someone familiar with your disease, sickness, or condition. 

The person filling out your VA lay witness statement should have firsthand knowledge of your condition’s effects and its impact on your life. 

You can obtain a VA lay witness statement from:

• Family members
• Friends and fellow service members
• Coworkers and employers
• A teacher, pastor, or mentor 

It’s helpful if the person filling out the form uses concrete examples and specific ways your condition interferes with your life instead of giving a vague description. 

Note : You can submit more than one buddy statement if it will be valuable to your claim. In addition, you can submit a VA personal statement and buddy statement with your claim, although you can only include one personal statement with each claim. 

To submit a VA personal statement, complete VA Form 21-4138 , Statement in Support of Claim. 

If you are submitting a VA lay witness or buddy statement, you’ll need to submit VA Form 21-10210 . 

The VA personal statement Form 21-4138 asks for basic information like name, social security number, date of birth, telephone number, and address. 

In the “remarks” section, you can add information or evidence to support your claim and anything you find beneficial for the VA to know about your condition. 

Remember not to leave anything off your form because it could delay your claim. 

Finally, you can submit Form 21-4138 online , at a VA regional office , or by mail to:

Department of Veterans Affairs

Evidence Intake Center

PO Box 4444

Janesville, WI 53547-4444

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Navy Officer Candidate: Motivational Statement Examples

Last Updated on August 30, 2023

Becoming a Navy Officer Candidate is a highly competitive and prestigious goal. It requires not only physical fitness and academic excellence but also a strong motivation and dedication to serve your country.

Writing a motivational statement is an essential step in the Navy Officer application process, as it allows you to showcase your passion and commitment.

If you are seeking inspiration or guidance to craft your own motivational statement, look no further.

In this article, we will provide you with some examples of motivational statements from successful Navy Officer Candidates. These candidates have been selected for the officer designator of their choice.

Some information below has been redacted for privacy. But otherwise, these motivational statements are unedited.

Surface Warfare Officer (SWO) #1

I’m interested in becoming a Naval Officer because of the top-notch training and opportunities that the Navy provides. As an officer I know that I will receive the training and guidance needed to achieve a successful career in the military as well as opportunities for a prosperous career in the civilian world after I have completed my service. I am always looking for a challenge. Whether it be physical or mental, the Navy is the best opportunity to prove to myself and others that I can do whatever I set my mind to. Also, as an officer I can put to good use the values and skills that have been taught to me since a young age. There is a strong tradition of military service in my family, and several members have been in the Navy, including my brother who is currently serving. I have always considered myself a leader and use the values my family has instilled in me to help myself as well as others to reach their goals. As a Navy officer. I know I can utilize these leadership values in addition to the training I will receive to achieve my highest aspirations and help those I am leading to do the same. I would also consider myself a hard worker and someone who knows the value of a good work ethic and time management. Since an early age I have done odd jobs for neighbors and friends such as babysitting, house sitting, and grooming horses. Since I was sixteen, have consistently had a job and on several occasions have had more than one at a time. In high school I was able to work 10-20 hours a week and show horses as well as actively participate in FA and maintain good grades, graduating Magna Cum Laude. Training and competing my horses, which I have been doing for ten years, has required a minimum of 15 hours a week. This included training with my instructor and practicing on my own, caring for the horses both before and after each lesson, and traveling to local horse shows at least one weekend every month. While attending college, I was able to continue riding and competing with my horses while taking 15-20 class hours a semester and working 10-20 hours a week, and I made the Dean’s List of Academic Achievement on three separate occasions. I was also able to participate in several on-campus organizations such as the Walter P. Webb Historical Society, Hall Council, and the Kat Krazies (a student spirit organization). In addition, I was able to effectively manage my class schedule to complete my degree in three and a half years. Graduating early was important to me so that my parents would not be spending too much money on my education and I would not have as many loans to pay back after graduation. Since graduating college, I have been working full time as a Recreation Supervisor at a resort while continuing to ride and train horses and participating in the Citizens’ Police Academy, which is a twelve-week course that gives ordinary citizens an insight into the inner workings of the local police department. Overall, I have always managed my time and put forth all of my effort to ensure that I was making the most out of every hour of every day. I wish to continue this tradition of hard work and time management in a career with the Navy. Being a positive role model is also extremely important to me. Through horseback riding I am around many younger girls of all ages. My mother has taught lessons for several years and I often help her students get ready and teach them how to care for the horses. I feel it is very important to be a positive role model for these girls and I try to always set a good example for them. Also, as a Bearkat Camp counselor (Freshmen Traditions Camp) and New Student Orientation Leader at Sam Houston State University as well as a supervisor at my past two jobs, I often work with individuals who are either younger than myself or are simply looking to me for advice and counsel. Because of this, I always try to set a good example and point them in the right direction. It is also my firm opinion that one should never expect anyone to do something for them unless they are willing to do it themselves, and I often implement this philosophy at my work. I plan to utilize the skills I use both at work and with those younger than myself to be an effective officer. Overall, I would consider myself an excellent officer candidate and would greatly appreciate the opportunity to prove my abilities. I know that with the skills I already possess coupled with the training and opportunities that the Navy will provide, I can become an extremely effective and competent Naval Officer.

Surface Warfare Officer (SWO) #2

I was not born with the innate conviction to be an officer in the United States Navy or any other career path. But my experiences growing up ideally prepared me for a future as a Naval Officer. Beginning in junior high, I came to realize that my classmates would do as I did, and would listen when I spoke. While in Mexico on a mission trip in 2005, I embraced this new-found attribute and led my friends in word and example as we built a house for an impoverished family in just one week. The same leadership attitude would exude each summer that followed, only in a different geographic location. I finally discovered a potential career path in the summer of 2008 at Texas Boys State. Following a riveting speech from retired CIA agent Jim Olson, wherein he highlighted his challenging career in intelligence and his beginnings as a Surface Warfare Officer , I knew my leadership skills had a future. Now graduating from college, my desire to lead others defending the United States combined with experiences in my past has brought me to pursue a fulfilling career as a Naval Officer. I began my studies as a freshman Business major at Texas A&M University with the thought process that such a degree would help me land a profitable job upon graduation. But after just a few months, I found what I was learning and working towards to be so unfulfilling that I changed my major. Once I switched to International Studies, and refocused my attention to the world instead of on myself, everything seemed to make sense. My GPA skyrocketed to a 3.71 and I have since made the Dean’s List. In addition to my studies I have kept busy working in the community for profit and not for profit. During my junior and senior years I have worked at a textbook store, volunteered as a tutor for struggling third grade students at a local elementary school and led a team of workers at the largest student-run service project in the nation, The Big Event. For recreation and exercise at school, I am a member of the Texas A&M Men’s Ultimate Frisbee club team. I was one of two freshmen to make the team, and by the end of the year, in a physically demanding sport where fitness is the foundation of success, I was an example of what can result from work and dedication I broke through to the regular playing rotation. In addition to playing on the traveling club team at school, I also began playing for a traveling club team based out of Houston, which I still play for. In my second year on the team at Texas A&M I took on the leadership position of Safety Officer. In this role I served as an intermediate between the team and Texas A&M Recreation Sports. In this role I prepared travel itineraries prior to tournaments and was responsible for the team’s compliance with the Recreation Sports Office. During my time as Safety Officer, the team was never sanctioned or suspended as had occurred in previous years. Balancing training, practice, and travel to tournaments as far away as Georgia, while maintaining my GPA, has taught me the importance of self-discipline and time management. These acquired and polished skills were especially beneficial this past semester as I embarked on the experience of my life. In January 2012 I departed Texas for an academic semester abroad in Granada, Spain that lasted until May. I chose Granada because, as a smaller Spanish city, there are very few English speakers that I could talk to, thus forcing me to develop my Spanish. This was undoubtedly the hardest academic semester of my life as four of my classes were Spanish speaking and writing only. In addition to the language barrier, I went to Granada with a group of strangers, requiring me to go out and socialize in Spanish. In an unexpected pairing, I got that opportunity when I joined a local Ultimate Frisbee team in Granada. Speaking Spanish in a fast paced, athletic setting was very important to the growth of my language ability and I made many new friends and traveled across the country playing in tournaments. As the most dynamic athlete on the team, I became an unofficial team captain and led the team to its best-ever finish at the tournament in Madrid. While in Spain I also took advantage of travel opportunities and planned international trips to Italy, France, and Morocco. In between trips I volunteered with the reforestation of the “Generalife” Meadow in Granada to plant new trees after a destructive wildfire. My semester abroad took me farther out of my comfort zone than I had ever been, but I returned from it with a new understanding of myself and the knowledge that I could survive, and even flourish, while taking twelve credit hours in a foreign language, thousands of miles from home, while knowing no one. One of the most unexpectedly formative experiences of my life was working as a counselor at Camp Ozark for two consecutive summers. As a Christian sports camp for kids ages 7-17, this was one of the fastest paced job environments imaginable. Camp Ozark is one of the largest summer camps in the nation, and to run effectively it needs a clearly defined and obeyed chain of command. This is especially important because with high powered boats, shooting ranges, and high wire ropes courses where I worked, failure to follow orders can result in the death of a child. In my first summer I was recognized as the SWAT Team member of the first session of camp as the outstanding service member of the session. During my second summer I was recognized as the first male Order of the Arrow winner of the summer as the counselor who best displayed maximum effort, enthusiasm, and sportsmanship. Both of these were important leadership roles, but both were ultimately less important than the hardest task at camp: serving as a full-time role model to young boys and teenagers in a high stress environment. Working as a cabin counselor for twelve year old boys at Camp Ozark showed me the true meaning of having full responsibility for something that is truly valuable and how to excel working in a twenty-four hour, seven days a week job atmosphere. Despite not being born into a military family, through my life experiences I have come to the conclusion that a military career as a Naval Officer is the best way to use my acquired knowledge and talents for the benefit of the United States. I have a natural inclination to help others and serve the community around me, wherever in the world that may be. In my experiences, I have grown as a leader of others and acquired valuable skills such as time management, self-discipline, and public service to compliment my already embedded sense of commitment to serve my country as a United States Naval Officer.

Naval Aviator (Pilot) #1

Extraordinary, that is my desire for my life. Albeit a worthy existence, I want more than just a regular nine to five job, four kids, and a picket fence to surround my suburban home. Honor, respect, dependable, hard-working, responsible are just a few of the attributes I hope to further develop. The development of such attributes will help me to have the kind of positive impact on the world I desire. The United States Navy will definitely provide me ample opportunity to grow in these areas. From an early age, my parents have instilled in me strong moral values, including hard work, integrity, and a desire for excellence. Having served as a leader in my youth group at my local church for the majority of my childhood and during high school, I learned a lot about manhood from older role models in the church. Another area that helped shape my character was my involvement in team sports. Playing baseball, soccer and football | learned the importance of working as a team to achieve our common goal of victory. Persevering in the face of adversity during competition on the gridiron helps to prove what the old proverb says “as iron sharpens iron so one person sharpens another.” While participating in team sports, I learned not only the importance of physical fitness but how to interact with others in a group setting to accomplish our objective. For example, I was expected to show leadership to the younger players when I was a senior year on the varsity baseball team. In addition, my involvement with sports has taught me the importance of discipline and maintaining a positive attitude and a desire for success in everything I do. My desire to succeed led me to pursue a college degree. However I didn’t want just any degree, I wanted to learn challenging and practical skills. Years of study and hard work paid off as I am near receiving a Bachelor’s of Science in Construction Science, a technical management degree specific to the construction industry. During my college years, I assumed a variety of different leadership roles including a volunteer position at my local church, vice president for a Christian fraternity, and a treasurer for a prestigious academic organization. During my four years at Texas A&M, I have been a member of a Christian fraternity for the duration of my time here. It has been an incredible experience, providing me with a social break from my studies and providing me with great leadership opportunities. For half of my sophomore and junior year, I served as the vice president for this fraternity. My responsibilities included planning the social events, communicating and delegating tasks, and coordinating a community-wide outreach concert that cost over twenty five thousand dollars. Communication and preparation skills, I have learned, are an important part of college and life. Both as bible study leader and vice president, I was charged with setting a vision for the group and charting a path to help us navigate successfully the challenges before us. Whether it was leading our small group in prayer or blazing a trail of excellence for the fraternity, my preparation and communication proved invaluable. Amongst the most valuable attributes I have come to appreciate is time management. Finally, I have come to appreciate that if I do not manage my time my time will manage me. The second semester of my junior year I was honored to be selected for a coveted internship position offered through the College of Architecture of which my degree is a part. So, I moved to Austin, Texas and worked for a construction company, Harvey-Cleary, while going to Texas A&M part- time for the first seven months of 2013. During this time, I learned a lot about myself, including the development of some excellent work habits. My direct supervisor made a point to mention that I was a tireless worker pursuing my goals with tenacity and conviction and thus trusting me with even greater work responsibilities. In the workplace, there were plenty of times when I did not know how to complete an objective given to me, so I had to figure out the correct solution to the problem. It was on this internship when I learned that I am very task-oriented. My superiors observed that I am a quick study and demonstrated their approval by giving me additional responsibilities. I thrived in the alpha-male, high-expectation culture that encompasses the construction industry. These challenging situations I encountered on my construction internship will help me to be successful as a Naval officer. Over the course of my lifelong journey, my experiences have helped me develop many of the attributes that make me a strong candidate as an officer for the United States Navy. Moreover, my work ethic and tenacious nature will ensure that I achieve my goals. The opportunity to serve my country and lead sailors as an officer are the types of challenges I welcome and the reason I am applying for a commission. The mission of the United States Navy is to train, maintain and equip combat ready Naval forces capable of winning wars, deterring aggression and maintaining freedom of the seas. This mission coincides with my desire to change the world. I believe it is my destiny to become a Naval Officer and have the kind of impact most have only imagined.

Naval Aviator (Pilot) #2

Leadership. It is the cornerstone on which all organizations are built, maintained, and improved. It is through a legacy of superior leadership that the United States Navy has established itself as the single dominant naval force in the history of the world. It is this legacy of superior leadership that I feel compelled to join. Throughout my life I have been a natural leader. Through training with the Boy Scouts as a youth, the Marine Corps as a young adult, and while working and studying as a student at Texas A&M, I have taken my natural abilities and carefully honed them through classroom studies and application. As a youth I found encouragement from my father to join the Boy Scouts. Though at first I was resistant to the program, I soon found value in the lessons I learned about citizenship, loyalty, service, and leadership from Troop 600 of the Sam Houston Area Council. Through self determination, I steadily progressed through the scout ranks; earning friends and respect along the way. As a Life Scout, I took up the mantle of Patrol Leader, making me responsible for 10 other boys. After another year, I earned the title of Eagle Scout. I attended both Junior Leader Training Camp (JLTC) and National Junior Leader Training Camp (NJLTC). After completing NJLTC I served on the staff of two JLTC programs. My first, as a Camp Quartermaster, in charge of food and supplies for all staff and campers, and my second as Assistant Senior Patrol Leader of the Camp, the equivalent of an XO. In this role I was in charge of programs and staff presentations. During this time, I was also voted to become the Senior Patrol Leader of my home Troop, and now responsible for conducting our meetings, camping trips, and setting the example for over 40 young scouts. Soon after this I was inducted into the Order of the Arrow where I learned about cheerful service to God and Country. Overall I feel that I had a very successful career as a Boy Scout and that it has prepared me very well for the many challenges yet to come in my life. After one year of college, I found that I had no definitive direction on where I wanted to go in life. I decided at that particular time, college was not my motivation. I needed something that would allow me time to challenge myself outside of the classroom while providing the opportunity to grow personally and professionally. After careful research and planning, I decided to enlist with the Marine Corps as an aviation contract option. After arriving at MCRD San Diego and completing in-processing I classed up with India Company and began my training. After two weeks I fell ill and was transferred to a recovery platoon where I spent two months and was offered a medical discharge. I refused the discharge option and set about ensuring the return of my health and preparing for my return to training. My determination paid off with my return to a training platoon in Golf Company where I spent the majority of the rest of training as the Guide. As the Platoon Guide I provided direct leadership to my fellow recruits and led by example. Helping my fellow recruits with studying Marine Corps Knowledge or with physical training was commonplace. I graduated from MCRD San Diego as a Platoon Honorman. After completing Marine Combat Training I was then transferred to CNATT (Center for Naval Aviation Technical Training) where I graduated with exceptional marks. I was then assigned to HMLA-169 where I served as a Huey/Cobra power plant mechanic. As a Lance Corporal there was very little I could do in the way of leadership aside from encouraging my peers to better themselves. I acquired my Cobra Plane Captain certification before our first deployment and my Huey Plane Captain certification shortly after our return, seven months later. I attended Corporals Course at Del Mar on Camp Pendleton where my leadership skills were further sharpened. Shortly after I earned the rank of Sergeant and was assigned eight Marines to guide as a mentor. As a Sergeant, I earned my Collateral Duty Inspector certification which allowed me to inspect and sign off maintenance performed by junior marines as correct and safe for flight. After five years with the Marine Corps my enlistment was up and I had decided that I needed to complete the college education that I started. Returning to college after working for so long was one of the hardest things I have ever had to do. Returning to college at Texas A&M was a greater challenge than I had anticipated, but not so tough that I have not excelled. While attending classes full time I also worked part time at Easterwood Airport as a line and fuel technician. Though I did not serve in any official leadership role, I made sure to set the example for junior technicians and hold them accountable for actions taken. Balancing my class load and work at the airport was difficult but rewarding, I have maintained an excellent grade point average while continuing to provide for my family. All of these events, and others, have helped to shape me into the man I am today. Through my experiences with the Boy Scouts, the United States Marine Corps, and as a student at Texas A&M I have sharpened the natural leadership abilities that I already possessed. I am ready to continue serving my country and look forward to facing the challenges that I know I will find as a Naval officer. Being intrinsically motivated, I am certain that my drive for excellence will be a great asset as I find a place among the superior leadership that comprises the United States Navy.

Naval Aviator (Pilot) #3

I have wanted to serve my country for as long I can remember. I have had 4 Uncles in the Navy with each of them serving in World War II, Korea, and Vietnam. They have inspired me since I was very small that serving one’s country is the greatest honor any man can have in his life. This country was founded on the principles of challenging freedom and spreading our freedom to the people that needed it the most. My uncles were ecstatic when I told them I am applying to join the U.S. Navy, I hope to make them proud by serving my country. One of my late great, great uncles, was killed in the Battle of Cape Esperance in 1942 aboard the USS Duncan. I had another great uncle who served as the Commanding Officer of the USS Roark. Before he died, he sent me several inspiring notes and memorabilia. He always told me not to give up my dream of becoming a Navy officer. I have been in leadership positions since I was a young teen. My first leadership position was when I was the captain of my 8th grade football team which grew into being captain of my sophomore football team. Later, I started working at a YMCA camp when I was 17 and was the youngest counselor employed that summer. Within 2 weeks of being there, I was thrust into being the head lifeguard at the pool which made me in charge of other counselors that were 4-5 years older than I was. This continued the next summer when I became a head counselor. My 4th summer there I became Water Front director which put me directly in charge of 25 people in and around the lake. I became the Captain of my Swim team my senior year of high school. I continued my swimming career in college and once again was chosen to be captain my junior year all the way to my senior year in college. Being a captain of the swim team, I had direct influence on my teammates. I was the liaison between the coaches and team. I mediated several conflicts and improved the relationships of the coaching staff with the team. My senior year we were Conference runner-ups in the Summit League which is a drastic improvement from coming in 5th my first year in college. I left college with 1 team record in the 800 freestyle relay and many wins. I chose to swim for South Dakota State University because I wanted a challenging college career. Being a normal student would not have been enough for me. I wanted the competition and the team atmosphere in my life. Being a college athlete taught me numerous lessons in my 4 years. The first was time management. This is a skill that I think is crucial to being a Naval Officer and Pilot . I also learned how to network with others. I needed to be able to communicate with my professors and coaches on my swim and school schedule and what needed to be done so I can be the best student athlete. I needed to be in the best physical and mental shape while I was competing and going to class. Getting up for 5 am swim, going to class all day then back in the pool by 2 p.m. which demanded my full attention everyday. Swimming for 4 years in college gave me the life skills to be a successful and hardworking American. I can bring the skills I have already learned and improve on them in the United States Navy. I have been flying for 3 years now and have flown with numerous Military pilots from different services plus many professional pilots with the Airlines. They have all taught me that while I seem to be “a natural” at flying, I need to constantly seek to improve my skills as a pilot. I appreciate your consideration and would love to have the opportunity to serve in the United States Navy. This would allow me to serve my country, hone my leadership skills, improve my motivational skills and continue to fly. I believe that all of the above traits and the content of my packet make me a strong candidate to become a Naval officer. I would be honored to be considered for the United States Navy Officer Candidate Program.

Naval Aviator (Pilot) #4

Following graduation from the University of Illinois at Urbana-Champaign, many of my fellow classmates have been perfectly content to move back home and start their careers. I, on the other hand, feel that there has to be more to life than just working for the next forty years in the busy suburbs of Chicago. I want to be able to proudly look back and say that I have been a part of something greater than myself. I know without a doubt that serving my country as a Naval Officer will give me that opportunity. I grew up in a family that looked upon military service as a higher calling. My father, cousins, uncle, and grandfathers have all served this country with distinction, and I always dreamt of following in their footsteps. This seed was planted early on. One day as a young boy, I went with my mom on a visit to see my dad at Barksdale Air Force Base. I can still vividly recall looking out over the tarmac and marveling at the majesty of those big B-52s. From that moment on I knew I wanted to pursue a career in military aviation. As I grew older, I continued to feed my hunger for all things military aviation with countless books about WWII. I was particularly inspired by the story of how our Navy rose from the dark days following Pearl Harbor to soon wield, within 4 short years, the most formidable Navy the world has ever seen. It was around this point in my life that I knew that I didn’t just want to be a pilot, but I wanted to be a Naval Aviator. I have never been one to sit idly by and let life just happen to me. Whether it was in the classroom or out on the field, I saw to it that I would never shy away from making that extra effort to ensure success. I trace all this back to my parents, who instilled in me the belief that if you want something in life you must pursue it with unwavering commitment. Throughout high school I continually pushed myself to succeed academically. I eventually finished third in my class, was accepted to the nationally ranked chemistry program at the University of Illinois, and won several scholarships along the way that enabled me to graduate from college completely debt-free. I also saw some athletic success at the varsity level in football, wrestling, and baseball. Participating in high school athletics taught me many important life lessons, such as the recognition of how much more our bodies are truly capable of, as well as the necessity of teamwork. During high school I was also fortunate enough to have served in numerous leadership roles. I was elected Student Government Vice President by my peers and performed duties ranging from organizing dances to collecting money for charitable organizations. As Student Government Vice President I learned how to set aside my differences and make compromises with others for the good of the student body. An additional leadership opportunity I had while in high school was as the captain of my wrestling team during my senior year. This leadership role taught me how to motivate others to achieve what they didn’t believe was possible – a very rewarding opportunity. My experiences in high school were very influential in making me the kind of person I am today. They taught me a great deal about the values of education, teamwork, and leadership – all essential qualities for becoming a successful Naval Officer. My years at the University of Illinois were a period of further refinement for me as an individual. I continued to take on leadership roles, namely as a Resident Advisor (RA) for a private dorm on campus. As an RA I found myself learning how to manage the fine line between being friendly with residents while also being an authority figure. The lessons learned from this experience would be immensely helpful to me during a career as a Naval Officer. I also strove to apply the knowledge I was gaining in the classroom through an experience as an Undergraduate Researcher. My time as an Undergraduate Researcher made me realize that I relish opportunities to continually learn and then utilize this knowledge in a practical setting. A career in the Navy would enable me to live a lifestyle full of such opportunities. Academically things were no longer quite as easy as they had been in high school, and thus I found myself working harder than I ever had before. It was under such pressures that I learned the priceless skill of time management. Initially I had trouble adjusting to the rigorous course load, but from the second semester of my sophomore year through graduation, I saw my GPA increase each successive semester. Due to my hard work during those four years, I was fortunate enough to gain admittance to the well-regarded Materials Science and Engineering graduate program at Texas A&M University. An integral part of my graduate studies in engineering at Texas A&M has been learning how to not just become an expert researcher in my field of study, but also how to share this knowledge with others through presentations and papers. Due to my program here at Texas A&M being quite international, I have had to make adjustments to reach across cultural and linguistic barriers. Learning how to relate to others from different backgrounds has been an enriching experience – one that would serve me well in a career as a Naval Officer. A career in the Navy would be the fulfillment of a lifelong dream. I realize that it will have its share of challenges to overcome, but I can think of no other lifestyle more suited for me. I am confident that the experiences I’ve had during high school, college, and graduate school have helped me develop the traits necessary to become a good Naval Officer. Becoming a Naval Officer would be a privilege I won’t take lightly. I look forward to the opportunity to help others, develop my leadership skills, and make my country a safer place. I would be extremely honored if you will consider me for the United States Navy Officer Candidate program.

Naval Aviator (Pilot) #5

The U. S. Navy represents the strength, the honor and the freedoms of this country. These are the personal traits of military service men and women that I admire and will obtain. I learned of these traits as a student in high school and developed a strong interest in the Navy. As I near graduation from Texas A&M University, I have developed a strong motivation to rise to challenges and my own strength and confidence have increased to the point where I believe that I will become a commissioned officer of the U. S. Navy, representing American courage and values. Courage which has met all challenges and values that has helped surpass all roadblocks of the past. Starting my studies as a chemistry major it became apparent that the level of intelligence required to complete the studies was advanced. As I attended classes and balanced my volunteer activities, my workload required a high level of commitment and my time needed to be balanced. Each class required me to adapt my technique to solve the problems presented. As the years passed my ability to effectively solve complex questions, in the lab or classroom, increased and the time it took to apply this ability decreased. Studying as a chemistry major at Texas A&M University did not allow for me to give anything but my complete focus to the studies. Handling the course load for the major also required many hours of focused study for each class and an ability to solve the varied problems presented. In my leadership roles I have learned that the most important quality of leadership comes from following, first and foremost. Leadership does not come from the ability to bark orders at subordinates; it comes from a desire and ability to motivate people to complete a common goal. During various mission trips, I supervised inexperienced and younger members. I developed an ability to organize and focus the different personalities and accomplish the goals of repairing a hurricane damaged roof and putting together a frame for a house. In the heat of south Texas and the island of Haiti, tempers have a short fuse and personalities tend to clash. Being able to motivate people to work also involves focusing people with different traits and skills on tasks that are most appropriate for them. With these concepts in mind, I was able to lead a combination of individuals that effectively completed multiple tasks. Another trait important to leadership roles is the realization that sometimes those who follow you may have a better solution to a presented problem and that your own choices are not always right. As a team leader in the MiniPharma program in college, I managed people who sometimes had a better grasp on the scientific method or concept we were using at the time. Being a leader does not mean you are the smartest person in the room, but it does mean that you are accountable for the success of the organization. I also realized that these roles, given to me by elders who believed that I had potential to fulfill them, came with a motivation to continuously make personal improvements. My grandfathers both are military veterans with one serving as a career Army officer for 30 years. Through them, I have seen all the leadership characteristics that the military builds in the Americans that serve and how leaders can be honed. I hope to be a commissioned officer with service oriented goals that are something greater than the individualized trivial pursuits that have overrun our world. In the Navy consistent physical and mental improvements in my life are obtainable goals. The U.S. Navy is a symbol that humanity does not have to become stagnant, leading to the inability to change and grow. As a U. S. Navy officer I will be part of an organization that not only demands improvement from its members, but helps to advance others and provides protection for this wonderful country and citizens of the world. As I become an officer of the United States Navy, I will have the ability to influence others and motivate them to rise to the next challenge.

Naval Aviator (Pilot) #6

Since childhood, I have been fascinated by aircraft and spacecraft. Attending the Fort Worth Alliance air shows became an annual family activity and quickly became my favorite; watching the high maneuverability aircraft zip through the air was intoxicating. Having had my interest piqued, I spent hours upon hours learning about various aircraft. Throughout my life, my father always tried to instill in me the importance of hard work and the value of the dollar. Despite my parents’ comfortable, middle class income, they insisted that I get a job and work for what I wanted. By age fourteen I was working for a small, local electronics business. Before I turned sixteen I had saved up enough money to buy my own vehicle. I continued to work regularly throughout my high school and college years. Because of these experiences, I have developed a strong sense of drive, responsibility and work ethic. I welcome jobs and tasks I am given and take very seriously the effort and work I need to apply to stretch myself beyond what I consider my best. During high school I developed as a leader through my time in athletics, as a math tutor, and working. I regularly coached my football teammates to work harder both in the weight room and on the field. During cross country practices, I collaborated with the team to set running goals, meeting early in the mornings to practice during the summer and motivating one another. During workouts, I frequently ran back after completing the circuit to run with anyone struggling to stay motivated. During the years I spent working in restaurants, I was often given the responsibility of training new employees since I was adept at our computer systems and considered very good at teaching and leading people. I provided tutoring services in mathematics to fellow students as community service during my junior and senior years; I even coached a young lady who was preparing for a placement exam to enter a college-level physical therapy program. Academically, I did phenomenally well in high school. I graduated in the top 5% of my class and received top honors for having the highest SAT score in my graduating class, even while participating in athletics, tutoring and working 20+ hours a week. These high achievements provided me with choices and opportunities to attend university, including Texas A&M, a competitive and prestigious school, well known for their rigorous Aerospace Engineering program. A decade after my first air show, working with advanced aircraft was and still is a primary motivator. Unfortunately in my beginning years at the university, I made textbook freshman mistakes and finished my first year with a much too low GPA. During the following years, I largely lost sight of my goals. I hit the metaphorical “rock bottom” when I was twenty-two years old, during my fourth year in college. I was on a five year plan for graduation because the GPA requirements for initial entrance into upper-level classes forced me to repeat prerequisite courses. I could have viewed this time in my life as a failure, but instead I stayed focused, continued my studies and decided I needed to make changes to my goals and aspirations. I had allowed myself to become physically out of shape during those first few years as well. This failure led me to a sudden epiphanic urge to get my life back on track. During the last three semesters of my college career at Texas A&M University, I transformed my life. I began waking up every morning before summer classes to run, bike or swim. I began sitting at the front of every class and paying close attention. I picked up extra shifts and worked more hours as a lifeguard at the university recreational center. My GPA for my last three semesters steadily improved from 3.2, to 3.4, to 3.75, all while working 25-35 hours a week and regularly working out. More important than the increase in my academic marks, however, was the palpable increase in my happiness. I had a new-found interest in my studies and my general satisfaction with life had improved by leaps and bounds. It was at that time that I learned the most important lessons of my life. One receives from life what one puts into it, and it’s never too late to make changes. I now live by these beliefs. While my time at university may have missed the stellar academic mark I once desired, it provided me opportunities for self-improvement, to learn from my mistakes, and to set rigorous expectations and goals for myself. I had to balance my time between school and jobs, but learned to sharpen my leadership skills. I worked hard and trained new people. I had numerous opportunities where I chose to take charge. I remember an incident where the manager did not show up and there was no one to open the pool. I took charge, called our director to make sure she was aware, and proceeded to run through all of the most important procedures, ensuring that lifeguards were properly distributed to each pool and the pumps were working. I also regularly performed community service work. While in the service fraternity Alpha Phi Omega, I led pledge classes in a multitude of service projects including running a hospice fund-raiser, running blood drives, cleaning up a cemetery, working Big Event (a community wide project done annually in College Station), and helping some of the locals with landscaping. During my senior design project for my degree, during which we designed an aircraft and then produced a working scaled down model, I was head safety officer and manager for my group. It was my responsibility to delegate important tasks and to ensure that all the information required was obtained and ultimately presented during our biweekly reviews. This gave me great insight into managerial leadership in the professional world. as our professor was a former test pilot for both industry and the U.S. Air Force and did his best to try to emulate that type of environment into our class curriculum. Now that I have graduated, my desire to work with aircraft is stronger than ever. I believe my background in aeronautics could be a great boon to our country’s military and would be honored to be given the opportunity to use my knowledge and drive to help defend our country. Thank you for your consideration.

Nuclear Propulsion Officer (Nuke) #1

“The purpose of life is not to be happy – but to matter, to be productive. to be useful, to have it make some difference that you have lived at all.” This quote by Leo Rosten has always influenced me greatly, and illustrates a major reason that I want to become an officer in the Navy. I have always wanted to join the armed forces and becoming an officer is a great opportunity to see the world, to be a leader of men, to help others and to distinguish myself. Growing up around my grandfather and uncle has also influenced my desire to become an officer in the Navy very greatly. My grandfather served as a navigator, commissioning through ROTC and my uncle served as an aircraft repair technician on a carrier. Listening to their stories is always one of my favorite parts about visiting them. They became role models to me as I grew up hearing about their exciting, worthwhile and often humorous adventures and I have long wanted to emulate their example and join the Navy. As a college student, at Texas A&M University, I am part of the NROTC program and a member of the Corps of Cadets. Through NROTC I have learned about all of the different career paths and opportunities in the Navy and learned about the NUPOC program. I realized how beneficial the NUPOC program would be to me because it gives me the opportunity to see the world, realize and develop my leadership skills and to serve my country. I believe that I possess many skills and attributes that will help me succeed in the program and as an officer. Throughout my life I have been involved in the Boy Scouts of America, rising all the way to the rank of Eagle Scout. The experiences that I have had have made me a better person and helped me to become a leader. In the Boy Scouts I held many different leadership positions such as head troop instructor, troop guide and patrol leader. The responsibilities of these positions helped to develop me as a leader, especially the head troop instructor position because I was responsible for not only teaching the younger scouts how to tie knots and all of the other skills but also the other troop instructors, making sure that they were doing their jobs correctly and planning when and what we would teach. I also had many opportunities to test myself and experience some unique situations, like going to Philmont Scout Ranch in New Mexico and backpacking through the mountains. On these treks I hiked 90 miles up and down the mountains with a heavy backpack, while carrying my own food and purifying my own water and was really able to challenge myself. I realized that I could reach higher and force myself to accomplish anything. These experiences in the Boy Scouts have inspired me to want to continue to challenge myself by becoming an officer in the Navy and the leadership and time management skills I learned will help me become a very successful Navy officer. Throughout my high school career I was able to excel academically, while participating in many organizations. I graduated top ten percent in my class of over 600 people from -_-_-_. I took many different advanced placement classes, like physics and calculus, and was involved in the Latin club, the chemistry club, the National Honor Society and the Boy Scouts. I was also a member of the school lacrosse team, playing midfield. All of these activities taught me how to manage my time and gave me opportunities to be involved and become a leader. Especially trying to balance playing lacrosse, being involved in scouting and excelling academically have taught me exceptional work ethic and how to achieve my goals. I am currently a student at Texas A&M University, studying mechanical engineering, where I am a member of the Corps of Cadets, as well as many other organizations throughout campus. I have excelled academically throughout my time at Texas A&M; I am a member of the Engineering Scholars Program, a honors program for engineering, and have above a 3.4 GPA, all while being an active member of the Corps of Cadets and a member of the NROTC Battalion. Being in the Corps has taught me many important leadership skills and has developed me as a leader more than any other organization I have ever been a part of. In my freshman year, I learned how to be a follower and I learned that in order to be a leader you must first learn how to follow. Because I excelled as a follower, I was selected, out of many people, to become a leader in my sophomore year. I am currently holding the positions of Fire Team Leader and Scholastics corporal in my outfit and these positions have taught me so much about what it takes to be a leader. As a Fire Team Leader I am responsible for the training and management of the new freshman in our outfit and as the scholastics corporal I am responsible for helping everyone maintain good grades. These positions and the fact that I am also working very hard to excel academically have taught me extremely good time management skills, which I believe will be very beneficial to becoming a Naval officer. Outside of the Corps of Cadets, I am a member of the American Society of Mechanical Engineers and of Class Councils, which is our student government organization that I was selected for my sophomore year. Being so successful in all of these organizations and academically have made me a very well rounded individual, with superb time management skills. Growing up in a Christian family, I have learned to put other people before myself and to help those in need. During recent years I have participated in many service groups benefiting the homeless, I have helped at many Eagle Scout Projects and have been active in my church youth group. These activities have shown me the satisfaction of helping other people and I would like to continue this feeling and make it part of my future career. As a Naval Officer I will have the opportunity to serve and protect the country that I love. I know that becoming a Naval Officer will be very difficult: I know that I will be forced to make sacrifices and I understand that there is a possibility of dying in the service. Despite all of these things I have always wanted to challenge myself and I believe that I can overcome these trials and distinguish myself as a Naval Officer. I believe that my past experiences, intelligence and leadership skills will help me excel as a Naval Officer and in the NUPOC program.

Nuclear Propulsion Officer (Nuke) #2

My decision to apply for the Nuclear Propulsion Officer Candidate Program began over the Christmas holiday after my first semester at Texas A&M. I enjoyed studying Calculus and Physics in high school and researched enough information to know I wanted to be an engineer when I entered college. It was difficult to decide which major was the best choice for me so I decided to look at jobs each major led to upon graduation. When I saw Nuclear Engineering I thought about how important that energy source can be when needed in the right situations and I was intrigued by the thought of so much energy from such a small source. I looked into the job field for Nuclear Engineering and saw the Navy was the largest player when it came to Nuclear Energy needs. Immediately, I went to the Navy’s website and there on the front page was a link to careers involving Nuclear Energy. I read the entire article about the NUPOC program and it seemed as if everything I was searching for added up. The leadership responsibilities, the efficient and disciplined environment, and the opportunity to work with an outstanding group of trained men and women who have all volunteered to be a part of something much greater than themselves. I have enjoyed working with other people for as long as I can remember. Whether I am leading or following, I am always keeping the team together and focused on achieving our goal. In high school, I challenged myself by taking advanced placement classes and competing on the golf team. My class work was difficult but I knew that hard work was the key to a bright future. I looked to golf as my outlet from class work and I became seriously competitive after just a few months of picking up the game. I feel that I offered a strong sense of pride and work ethic to our team during the season and after three years of hard work it resulted in the school’s first ever advancement to the regional tournament. In step with success during the golf season, I was nominated into the National Honors Society resulting from exceptional display of character and competitive grades. Elections were later held for President, Vice President. Treasurer, and Secretary. I ran for Vice President and was elected over 4 running mates. During my time as Vice President our organization coordinated a fund raiser and set up peer mentoring sessions after school for those who were struggling with their school work and wanted to receive extra help. These two events taught me a great deal about what it takes to be a successful leader and also allowed me to deal with great responsibility. I have been raised under the attitude that success requires a level of efficiency and discipline. Without discipline, boundaries are not set and things can get out of hand quickly. My parents have instilled the value of discipline and respect in me and I believe these traits have carried over and shaped me into a respectful, disciplined young man. I want to work for a team who holds me to high standards and expects positive results. I know the Navy will carry out these standards and results because of the importance they hold for the security of the United States. I am currently practicing strong levels of discipline during my studies at Texas A&M. It is imperative to stay disciplined during the semester in order to produce adequate results the university and the NUPOC program expects from its students. I have met some extraordinary people who have been in the Navy and who are currently serving. I understand the Navy is a voluntary service and I would be honored to work with a group of men and women who have willingly devoted their lives for the greater good of our nation. The opportunity to become an officer in the United States Navy is something I have taken to heart and I believe this opportunity has been presented in front of me because it is my duty to take responsibility, express leadership, and one day be a part of the Navy’s elite submarine force.

Nuclear Propulsion Officer (Nuke) #3

Life is complex. We were all born the same, but at life’s completion we are all very different. We make choices that will affect our lives in unforeseen ways, causing us to stray from an otherwise common path. Which path we select is unknown to us until we observe and ponder it fully- oftentimes many years after its choosing. We may find ourselves one day wishing we had done something we were too scared or nervous to – perhaps hoping we had taken a risk, tested our limits. For me, the option is a simple one. I want to be different, do something few people have ever done or will ever know. It’s not about glory or fame; I want to join the United States Navy to distinguish myself from others as a leader of men, a living embodiment of character and respect. Currently I am studying chemical engineering at the University of Texas A&M, and am aware that upon my graduation, the opportunity for financial success will be within sight. However, I don’t want to take a mundane desk or industrial job; I want to do something bold. I know a lot of people who barely know me may think of myself as someone who always plays it “safe.” and to a certain extent they are correct. But those who really know me understand that nothing will ever satisfy my hunger to prove myself. While in high school I enjoyed success in many facets of life, I could not have obtained them without hard work, dedication, and people who truly believed in me. There was a lot of adversity for me to reach my high school goals. I overcame a lot of personal and physical barriers of which included the Boy Scouts. I had entered as a young middle school adolescent but through the process and hardship gained invaluable leadership skills that will stay with me for the rest of my life. While in the boy scouts I obtained several leadership positions like patrol leader and troop instructor, where I would mentor the younger scouts, help facilitate their growth in the program, and really just serve as a role model. These were truly rewarding experiences that instilled in me the values of responsibility, morality, and obedience. Finally in 2012 all of the ideals the Boy Scouts instilled in me were tested during my Eagle Scout project, in which I proved to the adult leaders my transition from one who followed obediently to one who leads passionately. Additionally, I finished in the top 10% of my high school class, played the Viola in the symphony orchestra, and was an active member in NHS and student council. On top of that, during my senior year I was chosen to lead a group of 28 middle schoolers and 7 peers through a program that fosters team-building and group camaraderie. Though my patience was tested, ideals challenged, and buttons pushed, I navigated the team through unforeseen adversity and significant obstacles. In the end my team of 35 weathered the week and came through as more cohesive, understanding individuals. But what I am personally most proud of, and what really sums up my persona as an individual, was my rise to a starting role on the soccer team. From the onset I was perceived as almost useless. I was only kept on the varsity team because I had “played” four years in the program – and I use the word “play” lightly because really I was always a bench player, sometimes not even playing a single minute in the big JV games. They saw me as weak and simply not good enough. I remember sitting on the bench the entire first game of my senior season, utterly humiliated. But this did not make me fold and crumple, but rather made me stronger. I used it as motivation to get better, faster, stronger, and left everything out on the practice field everyday hoping for just one opportunity. I literally was the first one out and the last one in, as being a varsity soccer player was something I had always wanted, and I was not taking no for an answer. Finally, on a cold Friday night, an opportunity presented itself. The team was trailing and the momentum was favoring the opposition. One of our starters was hurt on a vicious tackle and the coach told me to warm-up, telling me that if I could emulate what I had learned in practice, that nothing could stop me. He was right. I scored a goal within my first ten minutes of stepping onto the turf, and the rest was history. I ended up starting most every game and the team reached the state-semifinals. Granted, this story is one based on a high school experience and may not carry weight to some people, it means a lot to me. I could have written this essay about coaching a youth soccer team, about how I am a first generation American, or maybe even about how my faith represents a unique blend of Hinduism and Buddhism. However, life is full of different paths and choices; And I believe this story of personal triumph best embodies the person that I am becoming. In a world characterized by so many paths, my most wholehearted goal is to choose that which never deviates from my moral compass. So when asked what motivates me to become a naval officer I think of all the things that have led me to this point – I think of all the triumphs and heartaches I have endured, and know that this is something I was meant to do. The opportunity to be a leader of men and to serve something greater than myself is simply something that I cannot pass up. I want my path to run through the navy, I want to experience things few have ever had the audacity to do. I know the path will be difficult and full of great hardships, but I also know that anything that means anything in this world is something we have to fight for, something that we must earn.

Nuclear Propulsion Officer (Nuke) #4

Throughout my life, I have been surrounded by a military atmosphere: from my father being a Sergeant in the Army and my grandfather being a 1st Lieutenant in the Army to my Uncle who was a Nuclear Mechanic for the Navy. I was brought up to believe that serving in the United States Military was one of the most honorable and rewarding events a young man could do with his life. My family also instilled in me that earning a college degree was more important than any other priority. So as I started applying to college, my thoughts of serving in the military became a secondary goal to getting a good education. However, I ended up being accepted to Texas A&M, the Texas A&M Corps of Cadets and the number two Nuclear Engineering program in America. It was here that I was introduced to the NUPOC program and becoming an Officer for the greatest Navy in the world. I recognize all of the opportunities this program has to offer from the world class reactor operations to its leadership potential. I believe every leadership position, activity and school hour I have taken has prepared me to become a candidate and eventually an officer for the United States Nuclear Navy. My high school career has had multiple achievements with my most notable being my Eagle Scout award. I have been in the scouting program from cub scouts beginning in kindergarten, and from there crossing over to Boy Scouts in 6th grade where I eventually worked my way through the scouting ranks. I soon became Senior Patrol Leader of Troop 430, and during that time I led over 80 scouts. Even though I am currently in college. I still actively participate in my troop back in Las Vegas and I also help with my cousin’s troop in Dallas. As I progressed through scouting, 1 learned my core values and learned the importance of integrity and honor. I was dedicated to completing my Eagle Scout project which allowed me to earn the highest award in scouting. In addition to those attributes I also held a leadership role very few people get to experience, so I consider earning my Eagle Scout to be the cornerstone of my current leadership traits. I do not have any difficulty with bringing people together to accomplish a common goal due to my leadership experience in scouts. I focus on mentoring the older scouts through their Eagle Projects and I teach backpacking and camping to the younger scouts. This allows me to give back to the organization that taught me so much about life while at the same time continuing to help me learn how to communicate my ideas more effectively since I am dealing with multiple ranges of age groups. While in high school I also actively played varsity lacrosse. For my senior year I was named defensive captain, MVP of the team and was 2nd place for Scholar Athlete for the lacrosse district I played for in Las Vegas, Nevada. While playing lacrosse I was not the fastest or strongest player, but I did have the best technique. I could take command on my side of the field during games and lead practices without supervision. I worked hard to get my team to be the best they could be and pushed myself and the rest of the team to meet higher expectations. Throughout high school I cemented my values and beliefs of honor and integrity but I also formed habits such a determination, commitment and a strong work ethic which will serve me greatly in my future endeavors. Currently attending Texas A&M, I am challenged every day, especially majoring in Nuclear Engineering which more than doubles the challenges I face daily. The traits that I have learned from my high school career have allowed me to succeed academically and in the Corps of Cadets. Throughout my entire college career, I have had one difficult semester and that was spring 2012. Due to an accumulation of events I pulled a subpar GPR which did not meet my high expectations I set for myself. However, instead of doing what many of my classmates have done, which was drop out, I buckled down and fixed my problems. As a result of my determination, work ethic and time management, I earned a 3.25 with five engineering classes, two of which were nuclear engineering based. From here on out, I predict a rise in my GPR even though I am taking classes such as Reactor Theory which heavily emphasizes the transport equation. While also in college I participated in the Texas A&M Corps of Cadets as well. This has taught me how to be a follower, a direct leader and an indirect leader. Currently I am learning about executive leadership. All of this has taken place in a controlled military setting, where I receive training from former military officers who have experience in similar issues. Currently I am a Cadet Master Sergeant in charge of scholastic achievement for cadets. I have had to learn how to give orders, receive orders; and probably the hardest part is instructing my own peers on how to accomplish a given assignment. Last summer, I received an internship as an associate engineer for National Security Technologies at the Nevada National Security Site. While there I was able to demonstrate my engineering abilities but most importantly I was able to further develop my personal work ethic. Even though I was given low priority work, I was still able to find mistakes in as built engineering drawings that would have cost the company thousands of dollars to finally recognize and fix. I also learned how to discuss technical issues with responsible cognizant engineers and since many of these engineers where former Navy Nuclear Engineers, I know I learned from the best. Near the end of my internship, I was given a project to draw piping diagrams in the facility by myself with little assistance. In the end, after I taught myself the correct way to complete the project by following company engineering manuals, I had to present these drawings to the engineering team. At the end of my internship, I was offered the same engineering position when I returned to Las Vegas during my winter break and for the following summer of 2013. Since my father and grandfather work at the Nevada Test Site, I have been exposed to the nuclear field my entire life, and for that reason I chose to obtain a Nuclear Engineering degree from Texas A&M. I am dedicated to achieving goals in the things I am passionate about which is both a career in nuclear engineering and the work opportunities offered in the nuclear Navy. More importantly though, I have learned how to recover from difficulties and work harder to excel in achieving my goals. I do not quit on any of my endeavors, and I always put forth my core values of excellence, integrity, discipline and selfless service in all things that I participate in. If I am in a leadership position as well, I work to hold others to a higher standard to obtain the expected goal. For those reasons. I believe I would make an outstanding officer in the Nuclear Propulsion Program.

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How and Why Veterans Need a Concise Personal Statement for a Job Interview

Most questions asked in a job interview aren't exactly about the one being posed. It's more about how well you answer the question and what your answer means below the surface.

When an employer asks a interviewee to "tell me about yourself," it's not just a chance for the potential new hire to talk about their hobbies, dreams and life goals; it's an opportunity to show the employer you have aspirations in line with the company's goals and that you can clearly and concisely communicate an idea.

This is where having a thoroughly researched and well-rehearsed personal statement is vital. Think of it less like a personal statement of facts and more like an elevator pitch for yourself.

But like any other elevator pitch, you have only the length of the elevator ride to get to your point, grab their attention and -- most importantly -- get lodged into their memory, whomever they might be.

This means you have about 30 seconds to become instantly memorable and appear capable in the eyes of a total stranger. But that's OK because the interviewer is looking for someone to impress them with just such a statement.

Like any sales pitch, you want to be able to describe what you're selling (in this case, it's yourself). You want to describe your background and education, what jobs you've held and what you're interested in doing now.

Start with writing it down, listing all the things you think are the most important in those three areas. Don't worry about writing too much at first. The next step is cutting things out, getting to the most important aspects of your pitch and trimming the whole thing down to a tight 30 seconds.

The first area involves your education and training. For veterans in a skilled trade, this is an important area because many skilled labor jobs require licenses and certificates. For unskilled labor or other career fields, this is where you'd list degrees and other training.

If you've been out of the military for a few years, have a lot of work history and aren't trying to get a job that requires a master's-level education, you might just briefly mention that you have a degree and where it's from, then go right into detailing your work history. Anyone with less than five years of work experience should definitely take the time to detail their education.

The second area will take up the bulk of the time in the pitch. Choose work history that has the most relevance to the job you want and list it here. Be advised: This is the area where everyone is most likely to stumble, fumble and ramble on. Think sharp as you navigate your work history.

Finally, write out your future goals and what you're interested in now. This is also not the time to fumble around, unsure of what you want. Choose an aspiration that is in line with the company's goals, one the employer will see as mutually beneficial. Employers know that an employee whose personal and professional goals are aligned will work harder and be more loyal than someone taking a job just for the money.

When you have all these ideas down, get rid of most of them by considering whether they're relevant to the job or employer you're trying to pitch to. Parts 1 and 3 should be about one sentence long; Part 2 should be three sentences long. When you read them aloud, do so conversationally and time yourself. Practice makes perfect.

It should take about 30 seconds to read your statement without going too fast or too slow. Memorize it and practice reading it calmly and conversationally to a loved one. Carefully consider their feedback if they offer some; it may mean the difference between success or failure.

And don't be too proud to cut things out. You may have time to detail them later.

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HOW TO WRITE A COMPELLING STATEMENT TO SUPPORT YOUR CLAIM

Crafting a compelling Statement in Support of Claim for your VA disability application involves detailed storytelling and clear articulation of how your service-related disability impacts your life. A well-structured statement can significantly enhance your claim by providing the VA with a vivid, personal insight into your experiences, challenges, and needs. Below, we expand on each section of your statement to ensure a comprehensive and persuasive narrative.

Start with a detailed introduction of your military service. This should include:

Branch of Service and Unit: Clearly state your branch and unit, providing a foundation for understanding your military background.

Service Duration and Locations: Mention the total years served and key locations, especially those relevant to your claim.

Roles and Responsibilities: Describe your MOS or specific duties, focusing on aspects that relate directly to your disability claim.

Detailed Account of the Event: If a specific event is at the heart of your disability:

Event Description: Provide a chronological narrative of the event, including the date, location, and what transpired. Use descriptive language to convey the intensity or seriousness of the situation.

Your Role in the Event: Detail your involvement, actions taken, and any immediate consequences you faced.

Eyewitness Accounts: If available, include statements from others who witnessed the event. This will add credibility and perspective to your account.

Description of Your Disability and Its Impact: This section is crucial for illustrating the breadth of your disability's impact on your life:

Physical and Emotional Toll: Discuss specific physical limitations or symptoms you experience. Describe the emotional and psychological effects, such as PTSD, anxiety, or depression, emphasizing how these have altered your daily life.

Professional and Social Impact: Detail any changes in your job performance, career trajectory, or employment status. Discuss the strain or changes in relationships and social activities, highlighting any isolation or withdrawal you've experienced.

Comparison of Pre- and Post-Service Life: Offer a vivid comparison of your abilities, hobbies, and quality of life before and after your service. This contrast can powerfully illustrate the disability's impact.

Medical Treatment and Response:

Treatment Timeline: Provide a detailed timeline of your medical treatments, including dates, healthcare providers, and treatment outcomes. This demonstrates the ongoing nature of your disability and your efforts to address it.

Accessibility and Efficacy of Treatments: Discuss any challenges in accessing care or limitations in treatment efficacy. This can highlight the complexity and severity of your condition.

Personal Testimony:

Personal Reflections: Share your personal journey in adapting to life with your disability. This might include mental health struggles, the challenge of redefining your identity post-service, or the daily realities of living with a chronic condition.

Hopes and Frustrations: Articulate your hopes for improvement or fears about the future. This section adds depth to your narrative, showing the human element behind the claim.

Supporting Testimonies

Family and Friends Observations: Incorporate statements from those close to you, detailing their observations of your struggles and changes since your service. These perspectives can underscore the broad impact of your disability.

Professional Insights: If applicable, include observations from your employers or colleagues about changes in your work performance or behavior, lending further evidence to your claim's validity.

Conclusion and Appeal for Support

Summary of Your Situation : Concisely summarize the key points of your narrative, reinforcing the severity and legitimacy of your disability.

Appeal for Understanding and Support: End with a respectful appeal to the VA for support, emphasizing the critical role of the benefits in maintaining your dignity, independence, and quality of life.

Writing Tips for Clarity and Impact

Narrative Flow: Ensure your statement has a logical flow, with each section smoothly transitioning into the next. This helps maintain the reader's engagement and understanding.

Emotive Language: Where appropriate, use emotive language to convey the intensity of your experiences and the depth of your struggles. This can make your statement more compelling and memorable.

Proofreading: Thoroughly proofread your statement or have someone else review it for errors and clarity. A polished, error-free statement reflects the seriousness of your claim well.

By crafting each section of your Statement in Support of Claim, you significantly strengthen your VA disability claim, ensuring that the VA fully comprehends the profound impact of your service-related disability on your life.

​ VA Forms and Submission Instructions

In this section, you'll find links to fill out common VA forms. After completing the forms, they will automatically forward to us for review and submission to the VA. Two forms, VA Form 4192 (Request for Employment Information) and VA Form 21-2680 (Housebound Aid and Attendance), require signatures from an outside party. Please download, print, and fill them out for the third-party signature, then email them back to us.

​ ​ VA Form 21-0781- PTSD, MST, Personal Assualt

VA Form 21-10210 -  Lay Witness Statement

VA Form 21-4138 -  Personal Statements

SAMPLE LETTER :

[Your Name]

[Your Service Number/SSN]

[Your Address]

[Email Address]

[Phone Number]

Department of Veterans Affairs

Claims Intake Center

PO Box 4444 Janesville, WI 53547-4444

Subject: Service Connection for Lumbar Strain

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to apply for service-connected compensation for a lumbar strain that initially occurred in 1989 while I was stationed at Fort Polk, Louisiana. During a field exercise, I was involved in lifting a generator off a truck, which resulted in immediate back pain. I sought medical attention at the base's sick call, where I was prescribed 800mg of Ibuprofen and placed on a temporary profile.

Despite the initial care, I continued to experience lumbar pain throughout my service. However, fearing stigma and potential negative attention from my unit, I refrained from seeking further medical assistance. This decision, driven by a concern for my career and unit cohesion, has had lasting repercussions on my health.

After my service, my access to medical care was severely limited, and it wasn't until 2012, through my employment, that I was able to seek treatment for my ongoing back pain. Over the past three years, I have been under the care of a private chiropractor. Recent X-rays have confirmed the presence of Degenerative Disc Disease (DDD) and bulging discs, conditions that trace directly back to the injury I sustained while in service.

The impact of this injury has extended far beyond my service and into my personal and professional life. I am currently enrolled in a pain management program to manage the constant discomfort and limitation of mobility. My ability to perform at work has been compromised, leading to periods of unemployment and financial strain. Furthermore, the pain and subsequent treatment have caused me to miss significant life events and opportunities to spend time with my family, contributing to a decreased quality of life.

I have attached all relevant medical records, including the documentation from my initial visit to sick call in 1989, records from my chiropractic care, and the recent X-rays and diagnoses. These documents substantiate the origin of my lumbar strain during military service and its progression to my current condition.

I request that the Department of Veterans Affairs recognize the service connection of my lumbar strain and its subsequent conditions. Granting this claim would not only validate the physical suffering I have endured since my service but also provide the necessary support to manage my health moving forward.

Thank you for considering my claim. I am ready to provide any additional information or documentation required. I look forward to your response and hope for a favorable review of my case.

The VA Disability Advocate's Advice

When filing a VA disability claim, providing comprehensive evidence to support your case is vital. Statements in Support of Claim offer a valuable opportunity to strengthen your claim by providing crucial details, additional information, and personal testimonies. These statements substantiate the event that caused your disability, offer insights into its impact on your life, establish pre-service and post-service comparisons, and personalize your claim. Gathering and including these statements significantly enhances your chances of obtaining the disability compensation you deserve. The collective power of these statements adds depth, context, and humanity to your claim, ensuring that decision-makers have a comprehensive understanding of your unique circumstances.

The VA Disability Advocates Main Office is Located in Las Vegas, NV. We Represent Veterans throughout the United States. 702-992-4883 

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Personal Statement for PEB

• Thread starter USN_1997
• Start date Feb 4, 2020
• Feb 4, 2020

I hear that we get to write a statement for the PEB. Any insight on how that should be structured? I don't want to say the wrong thing as I hear sometime these types of statements can work against the member. Any advise or examples from those of you who have been successful would be appreciated.  

PEB Forum Regular Member

Your lawyer should assist you in that process- you should be given counsel provided by your service. They will walk you through the process.  

chaplaincharlie

Super moderator.

A statement from the member is optional.  

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fidelis82 said: Your lawyer should assist you in that process- you should be given counsel provided by your service. They will walk you through the process. Click to expand...

chaplaincharlie said: A statement from the member is optional. Click to expand...

While the personal statement is optional it is a great way for your “voice” to be heard by the board members. Your medical record tells a story, but your personal statement can convey much more than medical diagnosis. It gives you the opportunity to tell the board who you were and how your specific issues have changed you today. @fidelis82 is correct. Your lawyer should be helping you complete a personal statement!  

• Feb 5, 2020

Mine was telling the PEB that I had been misdiagnosed and I submitted new medical records and doctor letters to the PEB and asked them to reconsider my case and change the diagnosis. They decided against me and i had to go around them and get the VA to accept the new diagnosis during my VARR... which resulted in my case being remanded all the way back to the MEB... but one thing I made sure they understood was that I was the guy who never went to sick call or the doctor... less than ten pages of medical records my first 15 years... that I was not a malingerer or hypochondriac and this was not all in my head...  

tony292 said: Mine was telling the PEB that I had been misdiagnosed and I submitted new medical records and doctor letters to the PEB and asked them to reconsider my case and change the diagnosis. They decided against me and i had to go around them and get the VA to accept the new diagnosis during my VARR... which resulted in my case being remanded all the way back to the MEB... but one thing I made sure they understood was that I was the guy who never went to sick call or the doctor... less than ten pages of medical records my first 15 years... that I was not a malingerer or hypochondriac and this was not all in my head... Click to expand...

USN_1997 said: It’s shameful that going to medical is viewed as a negative... Click to expand...

How to write a military personal statement?

How to write a military personal statement.

To write a military personal statement, start by outlining your relevant experience, skills, and values, then craft a concise and compelling narrative that highlights your commitment to serving in the military.

FAQs about Writing a Military Personal Statement

How long should a military personal statement be.

Aim for a statement that is no longer than one page, single-spaced.

What should I include in a military personal statement?

Focus on your motivation for joining the military, leadership experience, and examples of your dedication and determination.

How should I structure my military personal statement?

Begin with an attention-grabbing introduction, then a body that showcases your qualifications, and end with a strong conclusion.

What should I avoid in a military personal statement?

Avoid clichés, exaggerations, and personal statements that lack specificity and genuine passion.

Should I mention specific branches or roles in the military?

If you have a specific branch or role in mind, it’s appropriate to mention it, but also convey your openness to different opportunities.

How can I make my military personal statement stand out?

Tell a compelling story, use specific examples, and demonstrate your understanding of military values and culture.

Is it necessary to have military experience to write a personal statement?

While military experience can strengthen your application, it’s not a requirement to write a compelling personal statement.

Should I mention any potential challenges or obstacles I may face in joining the military?

You can briefly mention challenges, but focus on how you plan to overcome them and the lessons you’ve learned from previous experiences.

Are there any key phrases or terminology that I should include in my personal statement?

Using military-specific terms and language can demonstrate your knowledge and commitment to the military.

Do I need to include references or citations in my military personal statement?

It’s not necessary to include references or citations in a personal statement, as it should be a reflection of your own experiences and aspirations.

Should I mention any personal goals or ambitions in my personal statement?

You can mention personal goals, as long as they align with your commitment to serving in the military and contributing to the mission.

Is it appropriate to discuss any medical or physical limitations in my personal statement?

You can briefly address any limitations, but focus on how you plan to work within those limitations and still contribute effectively.

Can I use humor or informal language in my personal statement?

While a touch of personality is fine, it’s best to maintain a professional and respectful tone in a military personal statement.

How should I tailor my military personal statement for different branches or roles?

Research the specific values and requirements of each branch or role, and tailor your personal statement to align with those specifics.

About Nick Oetken

Nick grew up in San Diego, California, but now lives in Arizona with his wife Julie and their five boys. He served in the military for over 15 years. In the Navy for the first ten years, where he was Master at Arms during Operation Desert Shield and Operation Desert Storm. He then moved to the Army, transferring to the Blue to Green program, where he became an MP for his final five years of service during Operation Iraq Freedom, where he received the Purple Heart. He enjoys writing about all types of firearms and enjoys passing on his extensive knowledge to all readers of his articles. Nick is also a keen hunter and tries to get out into the field as often as he can.

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How Much is Your Military Compensation Actually Worth?

• Post author By Daniel Kopp, CFP ®
• Post date April 16, 2021

Understanding Your Entire Military Compensation

For any servicemembers who are transitioning out of the military or perhaps daydreaming about what that might look like someday, many of them have never considered the full impact that transition will have on their finances and total compensation.  Most of the servicemembers that I talk to are surprised after they separate and don’t have the same salary, benefits, or total compensation as they did in the military.   So what can you do about this if you’re set to separate or are thinking about it?

Every year, usually in early April, DFAS publishes the Personal Statement of Military Compensation (PSMC) with the intent to help make servicemembers’ full compensation more readily visible.  While DFAS states that this may be helpful in applying for credit or loans, the true benefit lies in understanding what your equivalent compensation would need to be outside of the military to maintain your same standard of living.

So what is compensation? 

In this context, compensation refers to the entire sum of salary, benefits, and other financial support that servicemembers receive.  The majority is “direct compensation” — money paid directly to you — while the rest is called “indirect compensation” — things that financially benefit you but aren’t a direct payment.  Indirect compensation can either be financial compensation or non-financial.

One example of indirect financial compensation is healthcare.  When an employer helps pay for your healthcare coverage, that’s indirect financial compensation since you otherwise would have to pay that amount.  Indirect compensation can also be non-financial like leave.

Direct compensation is readily apparent because these are clearly listed on your LES while indirect compensation might not be as immediately clear.  The goal of this post is to help you understand the full picture of all of your compensation.

It’s important to take a look at each detail of the PSMC since each analysis can differ based on personal circumstances.  You can access your PSMC through myPay right underneath where you can view your LES.   This article will probably be most helpful if you have your own PSMC to go through.    We will look at an example PSMC for this post and show you how to analyze your own.

Navy members should note they will have to visit the PSMC website calculator directly at: https://militarypay.defense.gov/Calculators/RMC-Calculator/

Direct Compensation

DFAS pre-fills in your basic pay, special pay and bonuses, expense allowances (OHA, COLA, etc.), as well as an estimate of the added value of indirect compensation which is usually based on the federal tax advantage of BAH and BAS.  This provides the starting point for you to add in some personal analysis about all the indirect compensation and add your estimate back in at the end to get your total compensation figure.

To help illustrate some of these concepts more concretely, we will look at an example of a hypothetical O-3 compensation.

• Basic Military Compensation: $85,047.96
• Special Pay and Bonuses: $2,472
• Total Direct Compensation: $87,519.96
• Added value of Service-estimated indirect compensation: $3,275.21

Estimating Your Indirect Compensation

As you estimate the various forms of indirect compensation, don’t stress getting each figure down to the exact dollar amount.  The goal is to gain a more complete understanding of what that benefit might cost you if you had to pay for it yourself so estimating is OK.  It’s also usually best practice to estimate conservatively on these figures so you don’t have a highly inflated final compensation figure to compare against equivalent civilian compensation.

If you aren’t sure what a benefit is worth, ask friends or family for help especially if they aren’t in the military and they could give you a more realistic picture of what benefits are worth outside of the military.  Below is an explanation of how you can go about calculating each of the indirect compensation categories on the PSMC.

Military Taxes

In the PSMC example above, DFAS has estimated that based on the current BAH and BAS, this person is saving $3,275.21 a year by not paying federal income tax on those two allowances.

Another thing to consider here is combat zone tax exclusion (CZTE).  The PSMC doesn’t list this as part of the analysis, and it could easily be argued that this is a direct benefit to help offset some of the challenges of deployments .  For many servicemembers however, a deployment might mean going down one tax bracket from 22% to 12%, but more senior servicemembers or dual-military could really reap benefits here if they own more significant taxable investments and drop from the 24% tax bracket to the 12% and its equivalent 0% tax rate on long-term capital gains and qualified dividends.

Junior servicemembers could also drop below the income threshold to be eligible for the Earned Income Tax Credit (EITC) which could mean quite a bit of extra money at tax time.  For this example, we won’t consider CZTE in my calculation, but others might choose to do so, especially if you deploy on a more regular schedule.

• Formula: (Projected) State Income Tax x Current Basic Pay = State Income Tax Benefit
• CZTE Formula: # of Months Deployed x Monthly Federal Tax Deduction = Benefit

Military Medical Care

Tricare is undoubtedly the biggest indirect financial compensation for most servicemembers and their families.   For servicemembers who haven’t had a full-time job outside the military, most are insulated from what almost everyone else in the country has been going through over the last several years.  Medical insurance can be incredibly costly for many Americans so this area of compensation is critically important to understand.

As a financial planner who helps people find and evaluate health insurance on their own through the federal and state exchanges, I just cannot stress how amazing this level of medical coverage is!

How much is Tricare worth to you?

One way to measure this is to see how much it would cost you to buy Tricare Standard coverage without the military paying for any of it.  This option exists as the Continued Health Care Benefit Program (CHCBP)  provided by Humana.  Similar to COBRA, this plan can give you temporary health coverage for 18-36 months when you lose eligibility for Tricare.  Basically, it means that you pay 102% of the total insurance premiums which in this case were previously all paid for by the military.

In FY20, CHCBP premiums would be $1,599 per quarter for individual coverage and $3,605 per quarter for family coverage.  In addition to these premiums, there will be yearly deductibles and cost-shares similar to Tricare Standard.  That comes out to a minimum of $6.396 (individual) or $14,420 (family) respectively a year .  Plus, consider that is also a tax-free benefit while on AD so it’s worth even more than just an equivalent cash payout.

Another way to compare the value of Tricare is to see what health insurance coverage would cost you on the healthcare.gov exchanges .   This gives you a very good example of how much you could otherwise be spending given your specific family circumstances as healthy, young individuals can acquire more minimal coverage much cheaper than CHCBP while families might see some major sticker shock.

Many of my military clients who get out and suddenly have to pay the full costs of tens of thousands of dollars a year towards healthcare they purchased on the exchange experience DRAMATIC sticker shock. Even employer-provided health insurance will almost always be far more expensive than anything they paid on AD.

Practice expectations management prior to separating and don’t expect your health insurance to offer as much for as little as Tricare costs.   The bottom line is this: don’t undervalue your Tricare coverage!

Pro tip: consider switching from AD to the Reserve Component to still have access to subsidized medical insurance through Tricare Reserve Select at still a low personal cost.

• Formula: Expected Civilian Annual Health Insurance Cost – What You Currently Pay Annually for Tricare Prime/Standard = Your Benefit

Military Pension + BRS Match

The legacy military retirement benefits only consist of the High-3 system as an all-or-nothing pension that requires vesting at 20 years of service. As such, it’s a little harder to directly value compared to the Blended Retirement System (BRS) direct matches which are more straightforward.

For the BRS contributions and match, just add those percentage amounts based on the basic pay rate right into your calculation. The BRS matching rate is comparable to many civilian employers’ 401(k) matching.

One of the good friends of MFAA, Doug Nordman, has done a great job giving some estimates of what that military pension is worth.  The trick of course is that the pension is still worth “nothing” until you actually vest in it so there’s no real way to say you’ve earned half of the pension’s value just because you have served 10 years.  To quote Doug, “Stay in the military if you’re challenged and fulfilled, but don’t join just to stick it out for a pension.  If the pension is your only motivation then you won’t last past the first obligation.  When the fun stops then you should leave active duty for the Reserves or National Guard instead of grimly clenching your jaw and gutting it out for 20.”

Still, it is critical to understand just how incredibly valuable an active duty military pension can be as an E-7 pension can be worth around $1.4 million at the time of retirement and an O-5 pension could be worth as much as $2 million!

This part of the PSMC analysis doesn’t produce a number to add into your overall compensation, but it does help you think through the calculus of staying in or getting out.   The more years of service that each servicemember has should also weigh heavily in this consideration as it’s easier to make the decision to get out after only 4 years vs. 15 years.

Thrift Savings Plan (TSP)

The TSP offers incredible cost savings as it is dramatically cheaper than the average expense ratio of traditional mutual funds or many employer-sponsored 401k plans.  In 2021, the TSP had a net expense ratio of only about 0.05% while the average expense ratio of the civilian TSP equivalent of a 401(k) and average mutual funds are much more expensive!

That means that if your TSP balance is $1,000, you are only paying about $0.50 a year in fees while that same $1,000 in an average 401(k) would cost you $5 – 10 (per $1K) a year based on plan administration or investment expense ratios.  Over time, that fee differential becomes a huge drag on investment returns — to the tune of tens of thousands or even hundreds of thousands of dollars — which you can see for yourself using this Vanguard tool .

• Formula: (Amount Currently in TSP x 0.01) – (Amount Currently in TSP x 0.0005) = Benefit

Life Insurance (SGLI), Dependency and Indemnity Compensation (DIC), and Survivor Benefit Plan (SBP)

Let’s analyze SGLI, DIC, and SBP in the context of the actively serving member to apply this to the PSMC, but understand that these concepts also apply to retirees albeit with some differences.  Many companies offer some type of group life insurance that is tied directly to employment and SGLI functions just like this.  Although individual servicemembers pay for SGLI, this guaranteed insurance is still pretty low-cost, but most importantly helps ensure servicemembers can stay insurable post-military with VGLI should something happen to them while in the military.  These are the other benefits broken out:

• Should you pass away, your family or designated beneficiary will also automatically receive a death gratuity payment of $100,000 regardless of whether you have SGLI coverage or not.
• If your death is determined to be in the line of duty and if you are married, your spouse will also receive monthly non-taxable Dependency and Indemnity Compensation (DIC) payments of at least $1,357.56 and an additional $336.32 for each surviving child are payable. DIC is generally adjusted annually for inflation.
• The family will also receive one year of BAH based on the current rate they were previously receiving.
• If you die while on active duty in the line of duty, your family is protected by SBP at no cost to you. The formula for this looks like this:   SBP = 0.55 x (2.5% x YOS x average of the highest 36 months basic pay).
• Due to some recent changes to how DIC and SBP work together, you should research the most current status to determine how much if any offset is given between these two payments.
• For our example here, we will just assume a surviving spouse and one child at $20,316 a year.

So how much life insurance would you approximately need today in order to provide a $20,000 a year inflation-adjusted annuity for the rest of your spouse’s life?  I plug the requirements into the calculator here (I used ~3% for the interest rate as inflation) which says that annuity is worth about $509,000 in today’s dollars given a spouse’s age of 30 and IRS expected life span .

That means I would need to carry an additional $609,000 ($509K + $100K death gratuity) in life insurance today to provide that same level of benefit to a spouse .  For the sake of estimating, we’ll use the SGLI rate of $0.07 per $1,000 of coverage at $609,000 x $0.00007 = $42.36 a month or $511.56 a year . [Note: You could potentially get a lower term life insurance rate than this rate given underwriting characteristics]

The equivalent costs of term life insurance vs. SGLI are usually easy to compare and many servicemembers often carry life insurance through companies like AAFMAA, USAA, or Navy Mutual.  Many people though don’t think about pricing out the income streams that their families could also earn through DIC and SBP when considering their life insurance needs.

The PSMC next has you calculate the value of annual pay raises, longevity increases, and promotion raises.  While the annual raises haven’t always tracked directly with inflation, the longevity increases, and promotion raises both offer standardized opportunities for increases in pay.  This one is a lot more difficult to measure though and depends on you remaining in the military so we will skip it for this analysis. 

One important consideration for you though might be the comparison here between regular raises in the military and whether or not your civilian career offers the same chances to regularly grow your pay.

Commissary and the Exchange

This category is very dependent on how much each family uses the Commissary and Exchange.  Recent PSMC estimates list out that the average Commissary benefit is about $4,600 a year for a family of four with most people saving about 30% of their grocery purchases.  Take into your purchasing habits to fully analyze this one for you.

• Formula: [(Average Monthly Commissary Spending x 1.24) x 12] – [(Average Monthly Commissary Spending x 12] = Average Benefit
• Note: To get a more accurate estimate, an older Stars and Stripes article breaks out the average savings by region and can range from around 19% to over 44% for OCONUS.

Federal Long-Term Care Insurance Program (FLTCIP)

This benefit primarily offers long term care insurance for those looking to help cover the cost of nursing home and other end-of-life care.   The goal of FLTCIP is to help preserve your retirement savings should a long-term care need arise.  Those eligible for the FLTCIP include all Federal Employees (Uniformed Service members), their spouses, adult children (including natural, adopted & step), parents, parents-in-law, and stepparents.   Given my current age, current and projected savings rate, and expected financial independence long before my 60s, I don’t have a need for this.  Your situation may be different especially if your parents could purchase through this benefit program.

Note that this benefit is not as good as it once was and is not necessarily something I would automatically recommend.

• Formula: Other Annual Long Term Care Insurance Cost – FLTCIP Annual Cost = Benefit

Education Benefits

The military offers some pretty incredible education benefits through Tuition Assistance (TA), the GI Bill, ROTC scholarships, Academy appointments, job certifications, and numerous other opportunities.  I’ve written about that using my own example here where I figured out how I turned $80,000 of education benefits into more than $2.1 million in lifetime value!

The primary education benefit to account for here is TA or service-specific associate degree program since it is a function of remaining on active duty whereas the 9/11 GI Bill vests after 36 months of qualifying service (ROTC scholarship and Academy grads take note that you must first finish your education commitment before starting to earn credit towards the 9/11 GI Bill).

If you are currently still serving towards the 36 months to earn 100% of your benefits or are still serving an ADSC because you transferred the benefit to a dependent, include a pro-rated portion in the calculation below.  There will be lots of variation about how much the 9/11 GI Bill education benefits can be worth so you can personalize this to your own unique situation.

Service Activities

Everyone’s use of the services provided by their base will differ greatly so this is another highly personalized analysis.  Among the most financially impactful is the child development center (CDC) since this cost is subsidized based on rank.  For those that utilize the CDC, you can try to determine the cost of a similar daycare off base and compare the CDC cost to add up your benefit.

Other things to consider include the fitness center, auto facilities, hobby shop, outdoor recreation rentals, etc.

Counseling and Assistance Programs

The PSMC helps provide some figures here ranging from $30 an appointment up to more than $5,000 for transition assistance services to help you analyze the costs for free personal financial management counseling, relocation services assistance, transition counseling, spouse employment consultation, and assistance from a wide range of services available from their services’ community centers.  Again, each individual circumstance will differ here. Note that some of these are given as an estimated hourly rate.

• Personal Financial Counseling/Education: $ 250 – 375
• Spouse Employment Counseling: $ 585 – 990
• Transition Assistance Services: $ 5096
• Non-Medical Counseling: $ 30 – 100

Legal Counseling

Military members and family members can get free legal assistance in a wide range of areas , including consumer law, landlord-tenant law, family law, estate planning, and tax assistance services.  The PSMC again offers their estimates for costs associated with everything from notarization or powers of attorney to tax returns preparation and consultations with an attorney. Note that some of these are given as an estimated hourly rate.

• Consultations with an Attorney: $ 150 – 175
• Wills: $ 250 – 3,000
• Notary: $ 10 – 20
• Advance Medical Directives: $ 100 – 250
• Client Correspondence: $ 125
• Powers of Attorney: $ 60 – 250
• Tax Return Preparation: $ 147 – 273

Space-A Travel

Space available travel for Uniformed Services members can provide substantial savings over commercial airline fares.  Space available travel is defined by DoD policy as a privilege (not an entitlement), which accrues to servicemembers as an avenue for travel.  This is again a highly individual element likely based on how close you are to frequent space-a travel opportunities.

Tricare Dental Program (TDP)

Tricare dental provides fairly good coverage, but is not quite the comparison as Tricare health insurance is compared to civilian counterparts.  Based on equivalent quotes for comparable coverage , most people could be covered by a similar plan where you live for about $30 – 80 a month.

Other Military Benefits

The PSMC stops its analysis here, but there are a few other benefits to consider.

The average civilian job has much less paid time off (PTO) than the annual 30 days of leave a year each and every servicemember receives.  Although I’ve never met someone who only uses that leave to take a month straight off each year, one way to think about it is that  you are getting paid 12 months’ worth of salary for 11 months of work.

Military life demands many more sacrifices on your time (TDYs, deployments, long shifts, etc.) and there’s certainly no such thing as overtime so perhaps this issue ultimately is a wash.  However, don’t discount the amount of paid time off you do get lest you be surprised when your civilian job starts out with only around 5 days a year.  Expectant or future mothers should especially value the longer military maternity leave as it outpaces most companies in the country as this is a rarer benefit .  

Disability Insurance (DI)

At most other jobs either your company offers some small level of disability insurance or you can purchase this on your own.  While most people might not know what disability insurance covers, they have probably seen this product advertised somewhere thanks to a famous quacking duck.

Disability insurance is coverage that will help pay a reduced portion of your previous salary if you were to get hurt or otherwise be unable to work anymore.   In the military, this is provided by the VA if you were to become seriously injured or disabled while serving in the military.   You would be evaluated and given a disability rating which would then be used to determine how much you get paid.

You would otherwise have to purchase a DI policy on your own to provide this coverage . The average cost for a disability income insurance policy is around 1% – 3% of your annual income (take note that most policies will only allow you to purchase around ~60% of your previous salary).  You would have to get a personalized quote from an insurance agent to get more details.

VA Benefits

Outside of the VA benefits specifically mentioned already, there are a host of other benefits available such as the VA loan, education and career counseling, VA medical resources, and other support.  Evaluate what services you already use or might expect to use when you separate for an estimate here.

Military Discounts

You may never have considered this one, but this perk can really add up as long as you remember to ask about it wherever you shop.  This benefit again is highly dependent on how much you spend and if the places you shop offer it.

Invaluable Camaraderie and Leadership Experiences

This consideration isn’t here to try and put a financial number on this one.  However, one of the biggest trend items from separating veterans is how they miss the close bonds of friendship that are often more like family for most.  You need to have realistic expectations that your average civilian employer will have a different (not inherently bad) culture in this area. 

Let’s add up some example numbers to see what the total estimated annual compensation is:

• Basic Pay = $85,047.96
• Special Pay = $2,472
• Total Direct Compensation = $87,519.96

PSMC estimate of indirect compensation (federal income tax benefit of BAH/BAS) = $3,275.21

• State Income Tax = $2,000
• Tricare = $16,000
• DIC and SBP = $511.56
• Pay Raises = $0
• Commissary and Exchange = $800
• Federal Long-Term Care Insurance Program = $0
• Education Programs = $180
• Services Activities = $400
• Counseling Assistance = $300
• Legal Help = $400
• Space-A = $0
• Tricare Dental = $216
• Disability Insurance = $1,740
• VA Benefits = $0
• Military discounts = $2,000
• Total Indirect Compensation Estimate = $24,857.56

Example Total Estimated Compensation = $87,519.96 + $24,857.56 = $112,377.52

Service in the military can bring with it quite a lot of financial benefits that are often underappreciated or not considered when evaluating total compensation.   In fact, most servicemembers earn more in total compensation than their civilian counterparts when you consider similar levels of education and experience.  After this article, I trust you are better able to understand and analyze your PSMC.  This can then help you evaluate equivalent civilian employment opportunities or perhaps even come to the realization that you’re better off staying the military for now.  In any case, make sure to appreciate each of these benefits now whether you’re getting out soon or will stay for a whole career.  In this case, it’s pretty interesting to realize that the total compensation is significantly higher than what the LES says!

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Military service is in my blood. My father and grandfather were both veterans, while my mother, who raised me as a single parent, also served. I regard continuing that tradition as an honor, and my application for the ROTC is an effort on my part to not only continue that tradition, but also improve it. No one in my family has ever served as an officer before. By joining the ROTC I hope to go on and become the first member of my family to serve in a commissioned rank. This would undoubtedly mean much to my mother, who also raised by twin sister, and acted as the kind of role model every youngster should have. A desire to follow her military example, and become a similar kind of person to her, is a massive part of motivation for joining the ROTC. One quality which my mother has always shown is mental toughness. This is a hugely admirable skill that I believe I can develop during my time with the ROTC.

Possessing that mental toughness allows an individual to show leadership and confidence in testing situations. In my future career, I aim to work in legislature, providing the kind leadership in government that I hope to have shown during my time in the ROTC. By joining the ROTC, I hope to develop the qualities that make a good leader. I would also hope to develop all-round skills, transferable qualities which can be used to positive effect in my life as well as my work. I want to be able to take decisive action when I need to, to make the right decisions under pressure, and I believe that service in the ROTC is one of the best ways of acquiring these qualities. To acquire skills such as these though is not all about me; I want to use the maturity and experience I gain to serve society in as effective a manner as I possibly can, even when my military service is over. The ROTC creates leaders; I would like to be one, in every sense of the word, setting an inspiring example to all who encounter me.

Being a soldier, of course, requires great physical capabilities. A soldier must be fit and healthy in order to best cary out his duties. Sports have been an important part of my school life, as I believe that they help to develop the kind of physical and mental conditioning that a leader of troops requires. I made the Varsity track team in my Freshman year, and in my Sophomore year I managed to win the 5k race. My Junior and Senior years were distinguished by me playing a full part in organising a city basketball league. As well as playing and organising sports events though, I have also written about them, covering school sport for the school newspaper, ‘Inside 15000’. I have subsequently been appointed as sports section editor for the newspaper.

But my commitment to school sports and events runs deeper than participating or writing about events. I have helped to organise several events, including the BHS DECA’s successful attempt to host the world’s largest ‘Duck, Duck, Goose’ game. This raised money for a local girl who was battling terminal cancer. I also helped to set up the cafeteria for the Open Mic Night project, helping the journalism department with their planning and organisation. In my Sophomore year, I was a committed member of the Virginia DECA, while in my Junior year I was also active as a Student Council Association (SCA) member. Part of my work with the SCA involved setting up and organising ‘Terrorville’. This was a month-long event held in October. PEVS Paintball Field played a major part in this, and I helped them to manage the Zombie 5k Run.

This year, I have helped plan the Prom for my class, focusing particularly on the physical lay-out of the event. My talent for organisation and logistical planning was also shown when I participated in a school spirit project for my class, helping to build a float for the class Spirit Week parade. I have also helped out with Varsity football games, manning the snack shack to keep spectators suitably refreshed.

I would hope that these qualities and skills will be enough to show that I am of the required quality to be a valued member of the ROTC. I believe that I have the necessary toughness, intelligence, commitment, and willingness to learn that enable me to get the most out of my time in the ROTC. I would humbly hope that you will agree with me.

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Brainstorming, don't forget, sample prompts.

A personal statement is a narrative essay that connects your background, experiences, and goals to the mission, requirements, and desired outcomes of the specific opportunity you are seeking. It is a critical component in the selection process, whether the essay is for a competitive internship, a graduate fellowship, or admittance to a graduate school program. It gives the selection committee the best opportunity to get to know you, how you think and make decisions, ways in which past experiences have been significant or formative, and how you envision your future. Personal statements can be varied in form; some are given a specific prompt, while others are less structured. However, in general a personal statement should answer the following questions:

• Who are you?
• What are your goals?
• How does this specific program/opportunity help you achieve your goals?
• What is in the future?

A personal statement is not:

• A variation of your college admissions essay
• An academic/research paper
• A narrative version of your resume
• A creative writing piece (it can be creative, though)
• An essay about somebody else

Keep in mind that your statement is only a portion of the application and should be written with this in mind. Your entire application package will include some, possibly all, of the materials listed below. You will want to consider what these pieces of the application communicate about you. Your personal statement should aim to tie everything together and fill in or address any gaps. There will likely be some overlap but be sure not to be too repetitive.

• Personal Statement(s)
• Transcripts
• Letters of recommendations
• Sample of written work
• Research proposal

For a quick overview of personal statements, you might begin by watching this "5 Minute Fellowships" video!

If you are writing your first personal statement or working to improve upon an existing personal statement, the video below is a helpful, in-depth resource.

A large portion of your work towards completing a personal statement begins well before your first draft or even an outline. It is incredibly important to be sure you understand all of the rules and regulations around the statement. Things to consider before you begin writing:

• How many prompts? And what are they? It is important to know the basics so you can get your ideas in order. Some programs will require a general statement of interest and a focused supplementary or secondary statement closely aligned with the institution's goals.
• Are there formatting guidelines? Single or double spaced, margins, fonts, text sizes, etc. Our general guideline is to keep it simple.
• How do I submit my statement(s)? If uploading a document we highly suggest using a PDF as it will minimize the chances of accidental changes to formatting. Some programs may event ask you to copy and paste into a text box.
• When do I have to submit my statement(s)? Most are due at the time of application but some programs, especially medical schools, will ask for secondary statements a few months after you apply. In these instances be sure to complete them within two weeks, any longer is an indication that you aren't that interested in the institution.

Below is a second 5 Minute Fellowships video that can help you get started!

Before you start writing, take some time to reflect on your experiences and motivations as they relate to the programs to which you are applying. This will offer you a chance to organize your thoughts which will make the writing process much easier. Below are a list of questions to help you get started:

• What individuals, experiences or events have shaped your interest in this particular field?
• What has influenced your decision to apply to graduate school?
• How does this field align with your interests, strengths, and values?
• What distinguishes you from other applicants?
• What would you bring to this program/profession?
• What has prepared you for graduate study in this field? Consider your classes at Wellesley, research and work experience, including internships, summer jobs and volunteer work.
• Why are you interested in this particular institution or degree program?
• How is this program distinct from others?
• What do you hope to gain?
• What is motivating you to seek an advanced degree now?
• Where do you see yourself headed and how will this degree program help you get there?

For those applying to Medical School, if you need a committee letter for your application and are using the Medical Professions Advisory Committee you have already done a lot of heavy lifting through the 2017-2018 Applicant Information Form . Even if you aren't using MPAC the applicant information form is a great place to start.

Another great place to start is through talking out your ideas. You have a number of options both on and off campus, such as: Career Education advisors and mentors ( you can set up an appointment here ), major advisor, family, friends. If you are applying to a graduate program it is especially important to talk with a faculty member in the field. Remember to take good notes so you can refer to them later.

When you begin writing keep in mind that your essay is one of many in the application pool. This is not to say you should exaggerate your experiences to “stand out” but that you should focus on clear, concise writing. Also keep in mind that the readers are considering you not just as a potential student but a future colleague. Be sure to show them examples and experiences which demonstrate you are ready to begin their program.

It is important to remember that your personal statement will take time and energy to complete, so plan accordingly. Every application and statement should be seen as different from one another, even if they are all the same type of program. Each institution may teach you the same material but their delivery or focus will be slightly different.

In addition, remember:

• Be yourself: You aren’t good at being someone else
• Tragedy is not a requirement, reflection and depth are
• Research the institution or organization
• Proofread, proofread, proofread
• How to have your personal statement reviewed

The prompts below are from actual applications to a several types of programs. As you will notice many of them are VERY general in nature. This is why it is so important to do your research and reflect on your motivations. Although the prompts are similar in nature the resulting statements would be very different depending on the discipline and type of program, as well as your particular background and reasons for wanting to pursue this graduate degree.

• This statement should illustrate your academic background and experiences and explain why you would excel in the Department of Civil and Environmental Engineering (UMass Amherst - M.S. in Civil Engineering).
• Describe your academic and career objectives and how the Yale School of Forestry and Environmental Studies can help you achieve them. Include other considerations that explain why you seek admissions to the Yale School of Forestry and Environmental Studies and your interests in the environmental field (Yale - Master of Environmental Management).  
• Please discuss your academic interests and goals. Include your current professional and research interests, as well as your long-range professional objectives. Please be as specific as possible about how your objectives can be met at Clark and do not exceed 800 words (Clark University - M.A. in International Development and Social Change).
• Write a 500- to 700-word statement that describes your work or research. Discuss how you came to focus on the medium, body of work, or academic area you wish to pursue at the graduate level. Also discuss future directions or goals for your work, and describe how the Master of Fine Arts in Studio (Printmedia) is particularly suited to your professional goals (School of the Art Institute of Chicago - MFA in Studio, Printmaking).
• Your statement should explain why you want to study economics at the graduate level. The statement is particularly important if there is something unusual about your background and preparation that you would like us to know about you (University of Texas at Austin - Ph.D in Economics).
• Your personal goal statement is an important part of the review process for our faculty members as they consider your application. They want to know about your background, work experience, plans for graduate study and professional career, qualifications that make you a strong candidate for the program, and any other relevant information (Indiana University Bloomington - M.S.Ed. in Secondary Education).
• Your autobiographical essay/personal statement is a narrative that outlines significant experiences in your life, including childhood experiences, study and work, your strengths and aspirations in the field of architecture, and why you want to come to the University of Oregon (University of Oregon - Master of Architecture).
• Personal history and diversity statement, in which you describe how your personal background informs your decision to pursue a graduate degree. You may refer to any educational, familial, cultural, economic or social experiences, challenges, community service, outreach activities, residency and citizenship, first-generation college status, or opportunities relevant to your academic journey; how your life experiences contribute to the social, intellectual or cultural diversity within a campus community and your chosen field; or how you might serve educationally underrepresented and underserved segments of society with your graduate education (U.C. Davis - M.A. in Linguistics).
• A Personal Statement specifying your past experiences, reasons for applying, and your areas of interest. It should explain your intellectual and personal goals, why you are interested in pursuing an interdisciplinary degree rather than a more traditional disciplinary one, and how this degree fits into your intellectual and personal future (Rutgers University - Ph.D in Women’s and Gender Studies).
• Your application requires a written statement to uploaded into your application and is a critical component of your application for admission. This is your opportunity to tell us what excites you about the field of library and information science, and what problems you want to help solve in this field. Please also tell us how your prior experiences have prepared you for this next step toward your career goals and how this program will help you achieve them (University of North Carolina Chapel Hill - Master of Science in Library Science).
• After watching the video, please describe what strengths and preferences as a learner you have that will facilitate your success in this innovative curriculum. What challenges in our curriculum do you anticipate and what strategies might you use to address these challenges? (MGH Institute of Health Professions PT - They recently redesigned their curriculum)
• Your personal goal statement should briefly describe how you view the future of the field, what your goals are to be part of that future, and what brought you to pursue an advanced education degree in your chosen field. You may include any other information that you feel might be useful. (Northeastern PT)
• Personal Statement: In 500 words or less, describe a meaningful educational experience that affected your professional goals and growth and explain how it impacted you. The educational experience does not need to be related to this degree. Focus on the educational experience and not why you think you would be a good professional in this field. (Simmons PT)
• Personal Statement (500 word minimum): State your reasons for seeking admission to this program at this institution. Include your professional goals, why you want to pursue a career in this field and how admission to this program will assist you in accomplishing those goals. (Regis College Nursing)
• “Use the space provided to explain why you want to go to this type of program.” (AMCAS)
• Address the following three questions(Though there is no set limit, most statements are 1–2 pages, single-spaced.): What are your reasons for pursuing this degree? Why do you wish to pursue your degree at this institution? How do you intend to leverage your degree in a career of this field? (Boston University MPH)
• Please submit a personal statement/statement of purpose of no more than 500 words for the department/degree of choice. Professional degree essays require a clear understanding of the _______ field and how you hope to work within the field. Be sure to proofread your personal statement carefully for spelling and grammar. In your statement, be sure to address the following: what interests you in the field of _____ what interests you in a specific degree program and department at this institution and what interests you in a particular certificate (if applicable). Please also describe how you hope to use your ________ training to help you achieve your career goals. (Columbia PhD in Public Health - Epidemiology)
• Because each Home Program requires significant original research activities in fulfillment of the requirements for the degree, we are interested in obtaining as much information as possible about your previous research experiences. Those who already have such experience are in a better position to know whether they are truly interested in performing ______ research as part of a graduate program. Please include specific information about your research experience in your Statement of Purpose. You may also use the Statement to amplify your comments about your choice of Home Program(s), and how your past experiences and current interests are related to your choice. Personal Statements should not exceed two pages in length (single spaced). Make sure to set your computer to Western European or other English-language setting. We cannot guarantee the ability to access your statement if it is submitted in other fonts. (Stanford Biosciences PhD)
• Your statement of purpose should describe succinctly your reasons for applying to the Department of ____ at ___ University. It would be helpful to include what you have done to prepare for this degree program. Please describe your research interests, past research experience, future career plans and other details of your background and interests that will allow us to evaluate your ability to thrive in our program. If you have interests that align with a specific faculty member, you may state this in your application. Your statement of purpose should not exceed two pages in length (single spaced). (Stanford Bioengineering PhD)
• Statement of purpose (Up to one page or 1,000 words): Rather than a research proposal, you should provide a statement of purpose. Your statement should be written in English and explain your motivation for applying for the course at this institution and your relevant experience and education. Please provide an indication of the area of your proposed research and supervisor(s) in your statement. This will be assessed for the coherence of the statement; evidence of motivation for and understanding of the proposed area of study; the ability to present a reasoned case in English; and commitment to the subject. (Oxford Inorganic Chemistry - DPhil)

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